All Comments on 'Lizzie's Submission Ch. 01'

Reminds me of and my brother.

Thank you

Great start! Cannot wait for the next chapter. Thank you!!

Nice first story. I hope you continue it. I recommend that you get an editor. The typos and inconsistencies take away from the story line.

This is a great start cant wait for more

Good story so far, and well written, especially for first submission. Wish you had done it in one submission though, as it seems unfinished and it isn't even that long.

Great start! Brother sister stories with mdom/fsub are definitely my favorite. I’m super excited to see where this goes between the two!

Good story line

Need more info on characters

Need an editor of proof read for grammatical errors

Amazing story so far. I can't wait for the next chapter to see more of this taboo love story between Lizzie and Ryan! Well written.

Can't wait to see what is next for Lizzie and Ryan. An amazing story sis!

very very good, cant wait to see the next chapter!

Really enjoying this, get cracking with part 2

Very good! I want more...

Thank you all so much for your kind words! I'm glad you all have enjoyed the first part of the story♥ Chapter two is currently in the making so please stay tuned! Stay Safe and happy reading!

More please! 😉

Nice start. Looking forward to seeing the rest.

Excellent first story! Good build up just don't turn this into some cheap hook up for ryan!

They both know its taboo and Choose to take the relationship forward so give them some drama but a happy life together!

Nice start. Just don't involve other male characters. Ryan is enough.

He is pushing her too far and too soon. He is suppose to make her feel safe as a big brother should. Not treat her like she is just a conquest, good story thus far thanks.