All Comments on 'Locked Out'

Loved it

I had a silicate “locked out” experience too. I write about it recently with the same Locked Out title. It’s a frustrating and embarrassing situation that has a sexually arousing element, that sometimes only appears after the fact.

Good and funny story. Yep he’s never going to forget that day. I liked that she flashed him after she got in the house. Nice touch.👍

The last line has me roflmao,

This would have been 1000 times a better story if it had been told as it happened rather than a dialog wall recounting the events. If you wanted to run with the idea of having to explain what happened, have the neighbor make a comment to Sean, and then Sean ask about it. She's cornered and has to explain. Then cut to a flashback and go through the situation in detail. End with a return to the present to capture Sean's reactions. The more advanced formate would be to slice the flash back up to get Sean's reactions at key moments.

It's a good story premise, with loads of potential that can only be realized through more development.

Lol, an easy 5 stars.

Tess (uk)

I really don't think she should have told her husband.