All Comments on 'Losing'

The description of himself in the end is right though I would call him a pathetic simp(redundant)

A superb piece of writing. The fallout on Addie and Rob would make a story in itself.

This author seems to be incapable of learning. Oh my God it is the same old crap we have seen from every one of this particular authors stories….. extremely long-winded nonsense where the same point is repeated over and over again.

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The husband goes on adnauseam about how he wants to keep fighting for his wife and how she didn't want him. Paragraph after Paragraph after paragraph we read the wife saying that she really does love her husband but she wants the other guy. It never stops. The around and around conversation goes on and on and on for page after page after page

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The end of the story the narrator tries to argue that he's not a wimp or a cuck.

Yet when the husband finds out at the hospital where the wife was going and who she was seeing He says this…

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“Call me a cuck but Addie is my heart, she didn't just own it, she was my heart.”.

BUT SHE DIDNT WANT YOUR HEART

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And THAT author is why the MC is a cuck and a wimp and a loser and pathetic.

Even when the loser husband decides to nurses cheating whoring wife back to health she goes out of her way to fuck him over again at the end of the story

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Trying to fight for a woman who doesn't want you anymore while she is out fucking another man IS the definition of a wimp a loser and a cuck

Maudlin self-pity. He's hopeless.

I'll take up the author's invitation. Ha ha ha! Fag cuck boy, you truly got what you deserved. Stupid is as stupid does.

Just too long, too wordy, too much. Sorry but thanks.

Where's the love if betrayal and trust are part of the equation also.

Sorry. No. 2*

A World class cuck wimp, hé heal his wife for her lover, true essence of a cuckold

Yeah, the cuck chanters will come out like frogs around a lily pond, but you knew that before you started this story. Even as Jim was telling Addie about his belief in love you were telling us about your belief in writing. Same-same. There isn't any way to improve your articulations about those beliefs and, in the process, you have given us all originality and some LW firsts. If it's not a complete sell out then it is neither love nor story telling: it'd just be jerking people around. All the way every day, no regrets.

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Each of us needs to be reminded of that from time to time.

I have read over 2000 (yes believe it or not ) stories on loving wives and this is one of the worst I have read so hard so touching I hope that bitch dies of aids SORRY (jaybee186)

As they sometimes say in Texas, Jim is all hat and no cattle! For all of his talk about killing Rob, offing him, putting him in a dirt condo, taking him out, making him room temperature, whatever. Jim did nothing. This is typical for your husband main characters. They are so virtue packed with goodness that they just get trampled by every piece of crap that they encounter.

It would have been TOTALLY acceptable to end this story with Jim and Addie breaking up, IF you had allowed Jim a modicum of self respect. Jim's retribution against the man that actively pursued his wife Addie allows Jim to hold on some level self respect. It shows he did not go silently into the cold night of despair. If only Rob had struck Jim over some snarky remarks Jim cast his way. Jim could have defended himself several excellently aimed hard kicks with dire results sound fitting. Rob could get out of the hospital sans both testicles, this of course renders Rob neutered, this in turn means Addie won't be having children by Rob. If only she hadn't cheated on her first husband and thrown him away for an old college flame! .....

... Which also begs the questions: If Addie and Rob were together in college how long was it for? Four years tops? How long were Addie and Jim together for? Dating and married time was what? Four years? Less? More? So why did Addie have such a thing for Rob after all the time they had gone their own ways and married other people?

Sorry but what a lot of crap, he said he was big and when he spoke people looked up at him but sounds more like a cuck and a wimp and nobody would look up to that person.

Full of maudlin self pity.

Wow, 100 Big Blazing Stars for an EPIC story on such a grand scale about a fool and a heartless slut whore bitch. There are so many in life that we can run into that will take advantage of your love and affection like it was food and water. So many Young women go through life wielding their affection kisses and sex like a sword and act like they didn't realize that they were leaving dead bodies in her wake! Hear that JoJo? So many if you get around at all, there are so many 'lost souls' out there dying in loneliness and leftover love, never worthy of gaining their own spouse. but see others they want to steal. Mc should have just shot the two lovers and disappeared himself. The whore wasn't worth the time he spent helping her, in the least! Thanks Buster2U

I thought it was a very story and parts resonated with me, as i went through a lot of pain when i discovered that my wife was leaving me and thought i had given everything to our marriage. it still gives me a lot of pain when i see them and our kids out together all happy family when i was the stupid fool. I thought i had good friends but they also did not make me aware of what was happening. i was the useless idiot working long hours so that she could move on from me. hopefully there will be brighter days but it doesnt appear to be on the horizon at the moment. thank you for your story while it is a story of hurt it ties to how i feel currently. keep up the good work.

This story was one of the worst I ever read I don't necessarily believe in btb I just can't stand such a wimp !

What Harryin said...extremely long-winded nonsense where the same point is repeated over and over again.

Nothing new, always the same plot line. An unbelievable sub-human cuck husband, endlessly whining for his whore wife cheating but doing nothing at all to defend himself. Too much blabbering just to make the cheating-cuck behaviours acceptable. Maybe next tale we'll have an husband with a man brain and not a sheep one.

This is actually a rehash of ‘Happy Hollowdays’ albeit shorter. The same angst driven wallowing about losing the ‘love of your life’ and letting go because ultimately you can’t force someone to love you. I’ll hazard a guess that there might be a second helping in which he meets the next ‘love of his life’ and there’ll be rainbows and unicorns aplenty.

Did the author pen the final season of Game of Thrones as well cause it’s just as bad as this story?

Wow! If there ever was an example ‘what-not-to-do when your SO is cheating on you’ this is it! I hope our ‘hero’ enjoys his misery.

What a beautiful piece of literature, Truly sad, like a one-sided Gift of the Magi. Thanks for a beautifully written story.

Ed

Yes, you have finally convinced me…you are fucking chopped liver.

This story is a depressing screed on the 'virtue' of being a gigacuck! If I could give this negative stars, I would.

I gave it a 2. The MC is a total loser. He lets the ungrateful wife walk over him and does nothing. No retribution or anything. Just a sorry individual.

Agree with deepender, the story you were telling could only end one way. Cutting ties with someone you truely care for often feels like abandoning, even when the relationship has become toxic. An excellent story, but I wish I'd never read it.

Gag! If the shoe fits the cuck, wear it. The MC is a fucking dope who thinks he's the hero. He should have beat Rob's ass for cucking him, dropped the slut from his insurance and let her friend know, she should start making decisions for her. That should have freed up enough time for him to have divorce papers delivered when she wakes up. The tale of a loser.

What a pathetic wimp, he should have left her at the hospital.

This story is a reading comprehension test. The rating will be a statement about LW readers.

I cannot believe that people can take stuff like this seriously. Your mc wasnt a man he wasvone of those femmen incapable of making decisions and have no self respect. I'm sorry it sickened me i tried to fast forward to the end but clearly it just got worse.

Oh my... i am SO fucking happy i skipped to the last page. What a whiny cuck! His slut wife is still fucking her ol' college boyfriend, and this pussy-whipped retard rolls over, shows his belly, and walks away like the lame-ass loser that he is. If i was Addie, i would have left the wimp too.

I hate cuck stories and I found myself cheering for this guy to get cucked in the end. I'm not sure why you didn't have Rob and Addie complete the story by forcing him to watch them fuck all while they mock him for being such a pathetic sissy wimp loser. MC is a joke and his wife nothing but a cheating skank slut. All three main people here are utterly detestable. Agree with the sentiment I hope some complete disaster overtakes wife and lover and they die a slow painful death. Horrible!!!!!!!!!

What the actual fuck? For a MC who has all this bravado about how he could easily kill Addie and Jim, he sure is a pussy-whipped cuck. If the assholes were soooo in love in college, then why did she just not marry Jim back then? It's like the MC is just a plot device in his own story. You have written some doozies before, but this steaming turd takes the cake.

Utter waste of time. I was taken in at first but soon came to realize you were just wallowing in cuckoldry.

This is the worst I've ever read on this site! Like others, I skipped to the end because I suspected how it would end. It was worse. Every single character in this story was detestable. 1* and that's for having the chutzpah to submit it.

Once again this author show us great talent, at least when present us with a new premise or scenario. And sadly its the only good thing that anybody can say.

The writting style its still the same. Repeating and beating a dead horse ad naseum. The dead horse in this case its the unrequited "love" of a husband for his wife in name only, and how we read about how he is gonna recuperate her love, punish his rival for 1000 times...

I get the reason "Fight for your love, fight because like your life depends on..." and love your partner even if it hurts. From a classic or romantic pov, one person demostrate his/her commitment to a marriage or reliationship by his/her acts when life gets hard.

However Chopped, fail to present us that. What we read its a MC so deluded and pathetic thats it is incapable to see that his "love" (we can argue, that the whole marriage its a big toxic codependent partnership) its dead. That he lives in a embodiment of the Sunl Cost Fallacy, when if he continue to pour his heart, energies and feeling, his cheating and stone cold bitch/wife, will return to him... and even in the end, when he is proven wrong. He -or rather the author- still refuses to acknowledge that he only managed to waste time of his life, the love that he have for his wife, was for naught, and the wife was only an cold hearted bitch. So rather to at least showing us the MC steeling himself to create a new life, we got one last hurrah about giving everything for love.

And sorry thats the main take, of course others can disagree, honestly im not read all of the story and again i dont feel like i lost something very critical to understand.

This is just the 2nd or third commentary that leave in a Chopped's stories, and i dont think that will read or leave and opinion in others.

I tried this author again. What a waste of time. Please go away.

It’s a lot of words to say misplaced love. The MC could not let go of his love for his wife, happens in lots of divorce, love betrayal hurts like a heart attack!

The MC was a pathetic moron. Ugh

In a world of unicorns..... Thanks for the entertainment. I really enjoyed it. Perhaps the goals of a Harlequin novel with a much better author and done from the male perspective.

Okay, I admit that after the first hospital room encounter with Rob I skipped to the ending. "Fighting for the one you love" is a complete and utter waste of time if the one you love doesn't love/respect you. Grow up, you lost, move on, don't waste your time or resources on the bitch.

I’d love to know why you simply refuse to take notice of your feedback …. You have good ideas but your writing is actually rubbish…. Massive continually non evolving statements and endless repetition is yet AGAIN all through this. Get a proper editor

Again this feel just like the stories from and old writer Matt something. The main guy is always this perfect guy who just gets shit on over and over for the sake of love.

Hopefully, he will learn and choose a faithful wife the next time!

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Well written, a little overwrought. The long speeches are interesting, but not how most people talk. Well done, MC is a masochist, though, and loving wife is just cruel.

Awful writing and the dialogue is terrible.

This is a really, really good tragedy. Well written!! I know this (sort of) tells of the unfortunate nature of love . . . and also of the difference between love and lust or limerence perhaps. Love is the incredible work people do for each other. Love is full of choice, NOT merely instinct and impulse. I also somewhat understand (almost) unconditional love, which the MC has, but few of us can truly feel, so I'd guess there'll be lots of anger at the MC over this.

Still, I can't help hoping that living together for Rob & Addie turns out NOT to be the fantasy they'd both envisioned . . . and a year or two in, they both realize they were horrible people, who'd made horrible mistakes. The fact is that neither understands love. Addie may eventually find NOT being loved to the extent she was before will bother her more and more. She'll start to miss NOT feeling that true love (anyone would). No matter how hard Rob tries, his love will never measure up (because it never was true love anyway). And Rob and Addie (as well as most who know them) will start to see themselves and each other in a lesser light, perhaps even as villains of sorts.

It's petty, but I also think it'd be neat if it was one of those cases where her family asked her not to show up for some holiday festivities, that they were having Jim over, and didn't want her ruining the celebrations.

The growth might come when she and hopefully Rob came to realize that while lust and perhaps limerence can't be controlled, one DOES have some control over love . . . and that they'd never had true love, because they never put in the work and sacrifice required to realize it.

It's almost a classic tragedy, but where everyone continues to live.

Skipped to the last page after reading the first two and glad I did. Total waste of time.

Thanks! You are incredibly brave to publish your excellent story about the tragedy of a true love here in LW.

5 stars of course.

Your writing is suberb, admirable, and the plot was realy good to bring out the extremes of betrayal. I was captivated and touched.

Often I was reminded of my feelings while I tried to rescue my first marriage, tried for three years to bring back together my small family, not least for the benefit of our son, who was 2 years old in the beginning of the end. I still ended up as on only father.

About deep love and destruction: Even today, 40 years after the end of my first marriage, while being in a moderately happy second marriage with 2 more children (grown up now, of course), I think of my first wife almost daily. Not with love, not with anger, just a tiny bit sorry for what could not be. Still I wouldn't want to have missed out on the years we had togethe.

One critical thought. You wrote: "I remembered thinking, 'Dear Lord, she's still talking.' " With all heartfelt respect, I feel that thought applies to you, dear author, too. You often overdo the talking as well as the introspection of your characters. I see nothing wrong there, just too repetitive, and if not that, than still too much in general. For my tastes, at least.

Superlative writing, delving deep into areas where no one else goes. Yes, sometimes TOO deep and too repetitive, but this is a marked improvement from his/her earlier stories. Compared to 'Splashdown' this is a bare outline. To the story itself and its' definition of love- if that's true love, then I never knew it. Of course, who could possibly be the absolute SAINT that is portrayed here? No, it went too far, as love rejected by someone who promised to love him forever, soon turns into something else. True love becomes tough love and doesn't let its' recipient get away with wrong doing. A separation was in order after the hospital stay. At least an emotional one, and with the papers filled out. She was 'in awe' of him, but didn't value him. She valued a man who didn't deserve any love or respect. She didn't need for Jim to enable her.

Wth is up with the carol and the Mc first page interaction they met but didn't say jack shit. Kind of pointless it will probably come back 3pages later lol

On and on and on and on and on and on and on and on

I enjoyed this, albeit I would’ve like something more. It fizzled at the end. I will grant the authors their prerogative of ending their stories as they see fit, but it would have been more cathartic to have the MC meet someone lovely, and to have his ex-wife and Rob encounter difficulties. I know it is a suggestion for a pat ending, but it just fulfills a need to have something work out for the paragon of love and selflessness that the MC portrayed.

No dialog during the recuperation hurt ur story very badly

Your story is so far out there it’s a loss cause. No one is that patient

Seven pages of failure. Sometimes I wonder if people can be THAT clueless?

One of the most boring and stupid stories in LW! 1*

U need to stop writing in terms. U have a contradiction in just about every paragraph. As for the Mc is one messed up person. No background but I'm thinking either something very traumatic happened or his parents raised him in a cave. Seems like an extremely sub Canadian lol

Didn't even give us the fallout :(

And everything repeated wimp of a husband and a stupid wife, it was too long and boring. Should have divorced her the moment he found out.

What an unnecessarily long story. I felt that I was reading the same things over & over, the dialogues that continued to repeat themselves. I wonder if the author continued to write just to fill words on the page.

The weak- cuck? - husband, knowing for months that his wife's cheating on him, just waits for the affair to burn out, which it doesn't. Through the pages of the hospital room where her 1st & current lover speaks to her, hubby does nothing except introduce him to the family. WTF?!?! Worse, after all the sweat & tears of getting her back to almost normal, she's in a quandary about where her allegiance falls - Rob or her husband.

All this takes over a page in needless dialogue. Any man worthy of his card would tell her that he put in the work after the accident & during her rehab. If she's still in love with Rob after all that, she's spitting in the face of his love & for her to pack her bags & leave. The wimp didn't come anywhere close to this.

As stated, a much too long story - perhaps with an editor & major tightening, it would've been a bit better. But as is, I'll be nice, but can only rate this 2 stars. Bob

You got your user name right, this is as palatable as chopped liver.

There were parts in here that were exemplary writing, the first time. To let it go around and around, was tedious to read. 3.3*

I liked the fact that it was not “Splashdown” length. It has the same vibe and emotional structure. I also appreciated that there was less repetitive explanation. Still, there is the repetition of the same. To be able to say in fiction, what we couldn’t say in real life. To tie beautiful bows of “I wish I had said that then…” and say the things we think or once thought would make the heart rest from the turmoil of love lost or unrequited.

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But the purity of love is not predicated on the level of self-abnegation that your Rob goes to in the story.

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“But your demise would hurt Addie, so instead I would die pushing you out of the way of a bus, because I love Addie that much.”

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The problem with this is that is it’s incoherence and ressentiment. If in fact he were willing to die to spare her from sadness, shouldn’t he have just told her that he was happy for her finding love. And walk away? He is a smart guy. He will figure out that the epilogue is a ginormous lie. He can’t live up to his claim of “doing anything for love,” because in the end, he couldn’t give Addie his blessing. Please understand, I get the anger. That is natural and appropriate. It is just the lack of self awareness of someone who prides himself on his self-awareness that is annoying to me. And repeating it over and over in slightly different glosses doesn’t help me either. If you allowed your character to have that epiphany, well, that would be a different story. ‘Cause he could then laugh at himself and get on with life rather than pretend that he “would do anything for love,” without the real meat, “but I won’t do that… no, I won’t do that…”

Long but enjoyable read! 5*

Could have been told more effectively with one third the words. Repetitious and preachy. 2*

These motherfuckers talk too much, and that dude is a pussy.

I'm glad I skipped over some of the junk in the middle. That way when I got to the junk at the end, I didn't waste so much of my time with this crap.

The MC is suffering from morbid infatuation and is confusing love with being pussy whipped. Hope he learns his lesson but somehow that seems unlikely. At least he finally walked away. The characters are all pretty contemptible but the writing is good and the storyline is excellent. An unusual if somewhat overwrought melodrama. The constantly restated musings are just what you would expect given the MC's obsessive personality and are true expression of his character. 5*s.

This is the most depressing story I have ever read. On top of that the M/C's are both pathetic people who do not deserve to breathe. I have to find my happy pills and get stoned..... Pathos at its best and entertainment at its worst.

i only read all of this 2c if you had a reason why you should fight for a love that don't love you.

You tend to lose your readers with this being 7 pages long. It could have been more effective as a 2 or 3 page story. Were you tooting your horn to get people to page attention to you?

yeah a bit too much of falling on your sword here, can understand the love and giving it all you got because divorce in America is screwed up even with pre-pump you get busted with no-fault.

Was well thought out and written if not a little too long winded seemed parts were gone over multiple times by the husband and the conclusion of not wanting her to suffer at the hands of others then why send the live video feed to everyone, would have been interesting if you placed a single page about what Addie and Rob suffered at the hands of others.

The house and his business should have stayed his or at least made Rob pay rent to live there as he clearly didn't want to make her suffer more than she was. Conflicting emotions in this story alas. 4 from me.

Over and over and over. Rehash, repeat.

so does "dad" kill Rob?

Why would the police care why she was in any part of the town? They just investigate the accident.

Total garbage from the beginning and then it only got worse!

Not sure what you want. You build the MC into this smart, caring entrepreneur who loves his wife unconditionally. He accepts her affair, forgives her, and helps with her rehab even wiping her ass. The wife repays him by pinning him to the floor so she can take a dump on his face. Did you really need 7 fucking pages? I just summarized it in 6 sentences.

Not sure why the anonymous seem to dislike this so much...

...to me, it was a tale of true unrequited love from a woman he thought was his life partner, but learned that he always was second in her heart to an old boyfriend/lover.

Reading his pain-filled words reminded me of the lyrics in "Killing Me Softly", a song about a similar love triangle.

I gave this one all 5 stars...

Wow! There were so many powerful emotions evoked in this tale. I WISH I could so well.

Yet, one glaring thing kept bothering me. The repeated claim that Rob was a good guy. NO!!!!! Good guys don't move in on a married woman. It doesn't matter if they had history. He knew she was married and set out to steal her. THAT disqualifies anyone from being a "good guy." The fact that Addie kept telling Jim, and everyone else, that Rob was really a good guy, was a clue that Jim missed. Jim, Addie was never worth the kind of love you showed her. Once she started defending Rob as a good guy to Jim, his marriage was truly over. As in dead. He should have told her that he loved her enough that he would divorce her on reasonable terms, not kill Rob, and walked.

I have no idea how to respond or react to this story.

Meh. Too many words to yo say very little of value. Three stars and too many wasted minutes.

JPB

The problem is the sophistry. You didn't need any of it. This idea you have to fight for love is fucking stupid. Love is a team event. Both partied have to fight, not one. Your MC is ALWAYS doing the heavy lifting while the selfish wife laments and says useless platitudes and does essentially nothing.

This is how you fix your MCs, remove the broken and toxic trait they all have to punish themselves fighting for TWO people.

It's really a simple come to Jesus moment of, "Are we a team, or are you still trying to be a cake eater?" Because there is SOME truth to your idea about fighting for love. But it's two people fighting as a team. You project the same fight in initial courtship or protecting a mate in danger as equal to fighting to save a marriage. They are not the same! They never will be the same. And the worst part is you KNOW that. But you keep making the same MC that makes the same mistakes, and he always walks away saying, " while I was fighting for us, you were fighting me" no shit! Why did he or you think this was a noble pursuit drives me bananas. It's not romantic, it's not smart, it has no value to it. Marriage is a team. When your partner fights to end the partnership, you show them the door! That is not giving up, or giving in. It's cutting out the cancer. I know selfish women in your stories, horny man children that carry on affairs, and self hating martyrs are your three favorite characters, but pls switch it up

I think this belongs in the fantasy category because it bears no resemblance to reality.

GREAT STORY!!!

I would have BTB and BTLoer though...

Addie is much much better off. She's with a real man now, a Real human being. This weird AI character you created is so self anointed and holy, hell, even God couldn't love that stuffed prig. If you'll think about it, survival of the Fittest does Not mean survival of the most virtuous, the kindest, the most compassionate and loving. Addie and Rob will have an explosive loving romantic marriage, and hopefully a house full of children. Your MC might find some suitable female to procreate with, but who cares? He should become a priest, hell, the Pope. Or maybe just disappear into his world of saintly sacrifice and suffering; he does it So Well. Barf.

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Why not just have him blow Rob's brains out, then his own? No, you just tried to blow our brains out with this preachy syrupy sermon on sacrificial unlimited love. I'd barf again, but reading this drivel has left me empty.

Skipped to the end a lot of dribble!

Too much a melodrama and too much a medieval/Renaissance romance. Too much. Even Harlequin shows more restraint.

what a garbage. Too much emotions and husband looked like pathetic simp.

It is this behavior of men why women turn to bad boys.

The Simps' behavior is sickening

Kinda long winded to the point of being confusing

I stopped reading one the first page when it became apparent that you had your MC lying in his own thoughts as a way to trick the reader. It was poorly done. You tried to be clever as if he was just faking it to others, but you were not clever enough

The core of the story is good. She used Jim for 2 years, trying to convince herself that she could just ignore Rob. Jim did and said all the right things. The problem is that there’s too much repetition in the dialogue. It’s tedious reading.

Poweful analogy of greater spiritual realities. Revenge isnt winning. The fruit of her own deeds will be punishment enough.

I am so blown away with this story, not even sure to respond to this story. Jim is so much more of a man than Rob. The cheaters win? Pretty sure their life will not be wine and roses…

Alway like Choppedliver stories, the amount of dialogue and emotion makes these stories great. Thanks for writing.

The story started off bad, then you dove under the outhouse and went swimming. I stopped reading at that point.

There's a lot in this story. Sincerely.

One thing: Jim is a little much. The silence and passivity before the accident didn't work for me. A strong character seemingly would not do that. My take.

She deserves nothing. Hopefully Addie and Rob will find the hate from family and former friends unbearable. Jim deserves to find a better woman. Maybe when he does, he will see how he wasted so many years on Addie. One just cannot love someone like her that deeply. She wasn't worth it. It really came down to not wanting to lose. But, he didn't lose anything of value. Addie and Rob will resent each other so much, they won't last a year.

Jesus it was like watching a 1950's movie, all that weird talking god lord. Just picturing Gregory Peck walking off with a stoic look out the door and down the steps then seeing "THE END"