All Comments on 'Lost Touch'

"I suppose they did get caught having sex in the back of Darren's car."

Are you telling a story or are you editorializing? There's no place for this sentence.

Aswell or As Well : Common Errors in English

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Aswell or As Well : The aim of this Common Errors in English is to help you avoid low grades, lost employment opportunities, lost business and titters of amusement at the way you write or speak.

Low grades, definitely, low grades, especially when you're in high school.

YOu started well enough...Anna hadn't felt the touch... the you shift and later she releases her husband's cock...she the transition there? Very poor. Keep it in the past tense, where it belongs.