All Comments on 'Love and Fortune Ch. 02'

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LotOfReading over 1 year ago

Enjoying the read, thank you for sharing your work. Looking forward to much more!!

OpenWords over 1 year ago

You definitely have good talent as a writer. I enjoyed that. But you lack tension. The magical bracelet is a cool idea... But there is no struggle. Nothing to build anticipation. It's all to easy. And easy is boring. Please add some tension. Some struggle. Something for Ben to overcome. Otherwise, why read the story?

Anonymousover 1 year ago

It's going too fast. You should slow down a little and let the story build. I agree with the comment that that story lacks tension.

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Writing has been a passion of mine for longer than I can remember, and I've long since found joy in penning romance, shared love, sexual positivity, and playful exploration of kinks. I'm a fan of group dynamics. Most of my tales are from a male perspective primarily, focusing...

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