All Comments on 'Loving Moms Ch. 04: Caught Up in You'
by bob03567
- 17 Comments
Mkalfredmcabout 4 years agoWow! It is great having you back and submitting more great new material. Thank you.
Sex4lf57about 4 years agoMoms and sons at a drive-in movie always seem to have a good time. Loved it! Five stars and a favorite point!
Anonymousabout 4 years agoReally good story. Five Stars from me!
It is great to have you back and please keep the stories coming.
DNA
koinonia_92about 4 years agoAdmittedly, this is the first time I’ve read your work and it’s quite enjoyable. Minus a few typos, excellent flow and pacing. The only part that does not make sense, in my opinion, is Kayden’s mom appearing to be a “college girl”. Some of the position descriptions are challenging to visualize, but neither of those keeps the story from being enjoyably hot! I am going to read more of your work, so please keep writing.
TSreaderabout 4 years agoVery yummy indeed! It's nice to see you continuing with it! Thank you!
Anonymousabout 4 years ago"But I couldn't stop the eminent eruption that was building once more."
"Imminent" (about to happen) not "eminent" (respected, revered)
Good story, well-written
Anonymousabout 4 years agoLarge portions of this taken from The Rambler. You should acknowledge alwayswantedto as inspiration.
Anonymousabout 4 years agoI have read all the Loving Moms series. I like the different characters and situations. i like the way you develop the characters and the dialogue between them. I look forward to reading more so keep that mind churning. Thanks for your time and imagination.
Anonymousabout 4 years agoYou can do it on your own , we believe in you .
onlyfictionabout 4 years agoA well told story, and it is a fun one. But I can't say it is well written. Typos, grammar mistakes, tense confusion and frequent redundancies threw me out of the narrative too many times.
I don't want to just throw complaints around, so I can offer to edit a future piece if you would like. Even if not, please take greater care in the future and get *some* better editor than whomever edited this one.
I have given you five stars on many of your other pieces, and I look forward to reading more from you.
O.F.
xsiveoneabout 4 years agoI so glad to see you were writing again! This story upholds your reputation very well. Thank you for your work.
