Wow. That was really twisted. i loved it. While there are still technical skills to work on, you are without question, a writer. Your story is erotic and entertaining. Nothing "wannabe" about that. Nice work.
Lady Lovecome's Diary is now finished. I'll wrap it up as a series at some point but for now to read it in order do "Lady Lovecome's Diaries:" 01 thru 05 then, if you prefer a happy ending, finish on "Tending Lady Lovecome's Garden." Enjoy! BC