All Comments on 'Magic is a Powerful Thing Ch. 01'

Good concept great idea and grasp on magic, but how the kid suddenly knew spells and mind control, hopefully we can learn more in chapter 2

Nice concept. Looking forward to more. Only complaint is that this is not a chapter one, it is a commercial. Way too short.

I am sorry Teacher44. I didn't want to go overboard and post something huge on my first go. I do have chapter 2 fleshed out and written but need to grammer check it. I also have a good idea what to do for chapter 3 which will be written up over the weekend. Thank you though for your reply.

The way your laid things out for the future is very well done. We got to learn the basics of what appears to be a couple of the main characters and the next chapters should help fill in more of the backstory without dumping a load of information in the first chapter and leaving the reader to sort out everything. I guess it depends on what you look for in a story but I really like it. Thanks for putting it out so we can enjoy it.

J.D.

Very good but for one big "flaw" -- There's no indication that Steven/Sven had been a bully, or any motive given (even hinted) for why Jacob uses the magic to transform Steven/Sven into Stephanie.

Love this story