by noplex
Absolutely a superb chapter. But, we must have more of this wonderful universe you have created. Simply put, more chapters please. My thanks and gratitude.
i love these chapters. i have been hanging out for this fourth one..and i hope that the next one is not too far away! thanks!
I'm loving the story so far, plenty of action and some good dramatic moments in there as well. Looking forward to see what happens with Gavin and his powers.
There are (in my opinion) far too few good stories in magical settings.
Great to see you are going ahead with the story. I am looking forward to what happens next. It would be great to see that jerk and his friends taken down a few pegs.
I am glad to see you are going ahead with the story. I caught my attension a while back. I hope to see another part soon.
you have an amazing story, and i like your writing STYLE... but you need to work on grammar and spelling... mostly spelling. it looks like your using nothing but a spell check program, so it misses things, i.e. your first chapter, the word gesture is not spelled jester, etc. what you should do is check out the volunteer editor section of the site, and get hooked up with an editor there. we are ready and waiting to help, and far too few people actually email us.
I have been waiting for the next chapter of this series, please dont leave it so long next time, another great chapter this was, when are the olympics taking place?