All Comments on 'Mail Order Bride'

I feel like there is a good story here, somewhere. The base of the characters is hinted upon, but not developed. There is cleary a past. Several discussions had been made prior and yet there is a plot device of a surprise put in place. Then, despite the surprise. Allen instantly rushes into bed and handles his (hinted at, hung) partner like an expert who had trained and prepared for that instance. If he had so much experience, why would he need to resort to an African Trans Mail Order Bride service? Wouldn't this prowess mean he had plenty of sexual suitors or potential relationship partners? Only thing mentioned was being Blacklisted? Blacklisted how? From what exactly?

From a conversation with a friend, to the airport, to a Italian dinner (Which was seemingly skipped over entirely, so why mention?), to sex. All in a matter of moments. Again, I feel like a story is here, just needs the time to flesh it out.

Well... that's what I get trying to flesh out a story in 750 words. A lot of that got cut.

That story was as hot as an ice cube