by Algonquin Twit
...but found that it didn't quite work. The 'main menu' inserts really broke the flow of the story and just proved distracting. A great idea though!
<i>"First, your story has some odd pagination issues: the instructions from the submission page are present."</i>
I had a pretty good idea most people wouldn't get it, AT, as the above comment proves. Good effort.
First, your story has some odd pagination issues: the instructions from the submission page are present. Second, you've written it in the second person. This tense is rarely used, as it is clunky and odd.