All Comments on 'Make It Real'

I have a great relationship with my co-workers of India origin and have gotten to know them and along with their culture and traditions. That being said, the stories on here make me realize how much I still don't understand.

I really don't think these LW stories represent Indian culture. I doubt that every Indian woman is a whore and their husbands are cucks. Nothing here but trashy fantasy porn.

Fantasies are enjoyable at times,particularly those which are somewhat plausible.This one is so outlandish that it puts you off.

Next chapter please

Oh, wow. This calls for chapter two.

I like the idea of using the friend's clothes to make the role play more authentic. While women do frequently borrow outfits, a t-shirt would be an odd request. It makes me wonder if Radhika knows more about this couple's fantasy than Neelam suggests. Guys generally do not borrow outfits from each other - at least not in America. Things could be different in India.

I really like the inference at the end about this whole situation ultimately turning into swapping. Rather than simply saying that in your last two sentences, you might let the characters announce it in dialogue over dinner. It would be cute for Radhika to drill Neelam over her suspicions and have the conversation end up as a challenge to swap partners... then leave your reader hanging for round two.

Nice job. I'm always amazed at writers who can write so well in more than one language.