All Comments on 'Making It Right'

A very good tale of emotions and ... well ... great sex.

It's that mix in life we need. Feeling desired, feeling loved, feeling fucked.

Very good. We look forward to reading more.

michael and erica

eroticorgasm

I loved every erotic detail. You made me believe you were writing from very personal experience. And that's the best writing there is.

You took too long getting to the sex! I started to feel like I was reading a book or something. Maybe shorten the storyline. Other than that, keep up the good work on the descriptives. I really liked that alot.

Very good. I especially like the bath; it warms the reader for the sexual activity that is to come just as it does your narrator. You also included enough human relationship so it didn't become just another attempt at titilation. I hope you will keep writing.

I love the soft, sensual build up ending with an animalistic need to a "just get your nuts off" sex romp.