All Comments on 'Making Mum Tingle Ch. 01'

Looking forward to the threesome

Great Start.,,,,,

A really fun, interesting read. More please

Keep it going, can't wait for Chapter 2

Made my pussy wet and then there were consequences, I love your style of writing, I need more

This was bulbous bulbous bulbous with a side of monster.

I have read several of stories and lived every one of them. They are so loving and passionate. A huge turn on. Great work. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Another good one Jack. Looking foward to the next part

Couldn't get past the poor dialog in the opening 4-5 paragraphs.

Great story! I would have LOVED to have a 3-way with my mom and Mimi the hot neighbor across the street.

Great stuff, but slow the roll.

Don't, use, so, many, commas, especially, when, they, should, be, a, period. And please stop with the monster cock and how he can instantly please a woman just by walking in the room.

It has the potential to be a good story but get a good editor. Proofreading your own work doesn't work very well because your mind is tired and will miss a lot of mistakes such as the numerous sentences that were missing words.

Excellent writings. Put some bush on them older pussys. Us ole men like that stuff…,at least I do. Thanks, keep ‘em coming.

Your introduction to the the older woman with the unhealthy was good. I liked your buildup to you mounting her while the monitors for sickly hubby was a good cuckold touch. I hope you continue this story with more episodes of fucking your mom and the aged neighbors. I like your stories keep submitting

The dialogue is slow, akward and has too much punctuation. Why so many commas?

I've read a few of your stories, which makes me question why you so often need to have a monster cock. perhaps it's to distract from the stilted dialogue

A good story but you are following the same formula as most of your past few storie.s. Jack being game programmer is OK for reason to describe hirs wealth but you never bring in anyone from that industry as sexual interest to Jack. I really enjoyed your other stories where Jack did different vocations. The wine merchant where he goes abroad to buy the wines. When he was working in his mother women’s spa where he was the fertilely DR. Always though you left many untold stories behind keep up good works..

Man one of these milfs surely need to end up pregnant by all the cum dumping he is giving them, A fun ide would be he breeds them all in that apartment complex .

Intriguing fast pace but I like it and I want to read more. Great job🤗

Hi Jack

Good start and the concept is good but do agree that the language and sentence construction are stilted (e.g. the constant use of his name is unnecessary). I shouldn't criticise however as I am not in a position to offer editing.

All that aside I love your work and look forward to more of the same

Kind regards,

TD

A very animated story but typically male centric, there are two other women who were in relationships with the writer both of whom appear to have been dumped as soon as his mother moved in, what of their needs both emotionally and physically?