by AlexisMontage
This a great series, and the short chapters are keeping me interested. You've done a good job setting the scene and creating some good characters.
carry on!
This is the first series I have tracked and enjoyed. Excellent. Some observations (not criticisms):
You write well but I wonder if you had written the whole series first and then read it there might have been some changes. The back and forth works but at times needs a switch to provide some context - such as 'that was a Tuesday a month ago" or "the month before". The US sorority system is not copied in UK and Europe so some readers might not relate to age/maturity of the players. I think your level of aggression sometimes rises too fast. There might be stages between that could add to your build up and intensity.
I've got chapter 6 up. I've written chapter 7 but have been slammed with other work lately. Hope to have it finished in a week or so.
Glad you like the story!
XOXO
Alexis