All Comments on 'Manny'

Pretty good story. I enjoyed it.

Nonsensical, disjointed, ludicrous. hard to follow and definitely not worth another chapter...

Where is the loving wife?

Humorous story!

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This was damn different i actually enjoyed it! 4* for this effort!

A good story, lost in the poor editing.

Cute but rather confusing.

This story was such a cool read. Until you know a real savant this story may seem of the wall. But when you have worked with a couple you get a new respect for how the world is seen by others. It is truly remarkable to be in awe of someone, when you see how they view and interact with the world you never even knew was there.

This story reminded me of my friends and made me smile inside. When someone who is this smart and has trouble finding someone to spend their life with. It is amazing when they finally do find that special someone. This story while off the wall made me riminess on my friends while laughing at the writing to tell this tale.

It met all of my criteria for Outstanding Read ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐.

Keep Writing

JH4Fun

What a load of nonsense! Was it supposed to be funny?

Wow is this a weird story -- but with charm; 4* from me.

Very interesting writing. Somehow the story makes sense, Keep it coming

"(pardon the joke)" - I assume Manny doesn't realize it's a joke, that it's really, in the story, the firm's name, so this is the author, borrowing an old joke. If you have to draw attention to your joke,then it isn't much of a joke.

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Using "X"s instead of just making up names is lazy.

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If we've been reading the story we know that the defendant is Manny, know need for the parenthetical. The dialog attribution is stilted anyway, this is a story, not a script.

Strange!!!

LOVE slap-hapy-papy #9

The story has some potential, I think, but it's buried under a really bad writing style. If you want to write a script, that's fine but this is not a site for posting scripts. This is a site for posting stories. The epilogue was better since you dropped the writing style but it was still rough, especially with the (lack of) transition from speaking to Mrs Harper.

Rainman! Loved it!

Interesting approach with all the stats. I found that intriguing to explain Manny's mentality. But the story had some significant gaps in narration. It simply skipped over details that should have been included. Even the lawyer laughing and telling his opinions.

Uh oh, 15 minutes to Wapner!

Strange but, interesting. It was just difficult to follow the story as written.

It was certainly unusual, so credit for that. A bit confusing and flat (emotionally).

Started good.

Jh4fun has a point about the savant aspect of the story, I was not as clear in my original comment. The idea was brilliant, but NOT the execution. Readers are not savants. At least the lawyer should have been the sounding board to explain what was going on as he discovered his client's eccentric behavior.

Sorry, but is it just me or is this super confusing and extremely unsatisfying?

So, he spent an undisclosed amount of time in prison and was "financially crippled" for three years. And in the end, the two women who did it went to prison for two to five years. That's... anticlimatic.

And these women did that by first claiming he fathered Joey during the assault, without providing any actual proof that he is the father, then make a complete one-eighty and claim he DIDN'T father the child to keep him away from it, again without providing any proof, and somehow succeeded BOTH times?

I don't know. Inconsistencies like those, paired with the ridiculous Clairevoiance your MC has for some reason whenever he knew shit without explaining HOW he could possibly know about it, just makes this less than entertaining.

I thought it was a v good effort in trying to present the travails of someone on the spectrum

I give this 1.58 stars.

Weird. Not sure what was going on. But I liked it because it wasn’t the usual cuckold mumbo-jumbo.

Different for sure. Liked it, not certain why. One thing is certain. No one is going to fact check your numbers.

For the anonymous commenter who said it was in the wrong category, Long term friends with benefits, is equal to a wife. And a lesbian affair is still an affair. And this was a BTB's story. :)

Strange. Some more than minor gaps. Parts that didn't make sense. Three stars.

Thanks for the story HarryBoyles.

I will say it was- Oh, sorry Divorce Court is starting.

Gotta go, I'm

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AMerryman

There’s a 76.375 % chance that I liked this story , but only a 23.728 % chance I’ll get sex from my wife tonight . The odds are not good but the goods are odd .

Nice try. I hope it worked for others, and yourself. Thanks for the effort.

Thanks for writing! Looking forward to reading more from you!

I greatly enjoyed this tale. 100% chance of 5 stars.

Interesting. Thanks for your writing.

Thank you for this story!

Very well done! 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS! Thank you.

Very strange. Thanks.

Great story concept, but extremely confusing execution. There are too many leaps of logic from one phase to another.