All Comments on 'MARS Ch. 05'

Font’s not gonna be satisfied with just being paid back, now that he knows how to make Vehren trick. Dude shouldn’t have left the patio door open. Lawd, please don’t let Eris tell her mama what she saw!!

Lots of jarring verb tense changes in this chapter and 1st person-3rd person confusion (e.g., mixing “he” and “I”). Also, a few incorrect words —- “rustic” instead of “rusty,” for example. Spellcheck did you dirty! Suggestion: before posting, try to do one last read from an editor’s point of view, instead of an author’s.

This is one of my favorite stories on the site! Thank you for posting regularly.