All Comments on 'Mary's Awakening Ch. 01'

Good premise.

But she's never done any of this before. No reluctance? No needing convincing? Nothing with her boobs? No making out? Much too rushed.

Three stars.

Great storytelling! Loved the way you used italics to share what Mary was thinking. Don’t listen to that three-star person. They probably never even tried to spin a yarn or craft a fantasy. I will follow you.

Good premise.

Too matter-of-fact though. No foreplay. No making out. No reluctance that needed to be overcome. Just BOOM -- handjob. BOOM -- blowjob.

It's a summary, not a story.

Three stars.

Very spicy 🔥

Nice premise.

Good scenario.

Could have used more dialog. Him directing her how best to play with his cock, and not to forget his balls.

Her asking him to touch her more. Her breasts. Her nipples. Her ass. Did he like them? Could he show her how much he liked them?

Slow down the rush to orgasms. His. Hers.

Four stars.

Sequel please!!!

would love to read more of mary's awakening!