All Comments on 'Massage Break'

by Cinnamon_Areola

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metroalmametroalma6 months ago

It's the person not the parts that make for a hot look. Bra size is so meat market cheap. You lost me at DD. Just watching first episodes of 6 Feet Under. Brenda and Nate aren't gorgeous gorgeous, but they are sexy as hell together, for her it is in the sly sexy smile and bright eyes, no skin required.

AnonymousAnonymous6 months ago

Thank you for writing very sensual and wonderful. Thank you again.

Cinnamon_AreolaCinnamon_Areola5 months agoAuthor

Hi Metroalma 👋

A meat market is an accurate way to describe a strip club. But I see what you mean. We were discussing your comment on the Feedback Forum and I agree it could have been better. Thanks again for your feedback. I'll work to be better!

AnonymousAnonymous5 months ago

"Janet's hands berried in her hair," I read that three times before realizing you meant "buried".

"LOL" is only appropriate for texting or mailing emailing a close friend.

" These girls were rowDy with a capitol D!" This would be better as, "Rowdy with a capital (not capitol) "R"!"

34DD x 2. B-cups. C-cups. Sigh. Just no. It's as bad as describing a dick in inches.

DingbatwizardDingbatwizard5 months ago

“Janet spread Paris's hair apart, reached in, and began massaging her scalp.”

Wow, that is some head of hair! “Reached in” like a lucky dip?!

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I've been reading erotic fiction since the early 2000's but I'm new to writing it, myself. My kink is lesbian seduction via breast play, and most of my stories will center around that. I began writing to organize my fantasies. I have some original stories in mind and maybe ...