All Comments on 'Mastering Bella Ch. 02'

These are two fabulous stories - I eagerly await further episodes...

Thank you so much I have enjoyed writing my first story and your comment means a lot to me. My original plan is for 5 chapters, I hope you enjoy them as well.

Ellie,

Bella is providing a wonderful storyline. I know writing is difficult and time consuming but please know that we are really enjoying your work. Thank you,

Tom and Lynn

ellie, the bella character seems to be an extension of you and your own fantasies. Please continue the good work.

Very good story.

Interesting the way you have taken this 'game' they play, I am curious as to how the week will pan out.

a horny and turned-on girl isn't going to have a look of horror when her lover/master/friend tells her to do something. she's going to be too turned-on to feel "horror" .

If she lets Mel do all these naughty things to her, where will it end? Or will it?

A hot series.

I can see this is going to be a fun series. I liked, well...enjoyed the stuffed panties scene, Wickedly hot.

Given the length of this series I'm going to dispense with my normal story by story critique, unless I see something that simply stands out as needing work. I will leave a comment and a simple observation for each.

This one like I said, got hot very quickly. Very enjoyable.

MST

The idea for the story is great but the terrible grammar and terrible use of punctuation really takes away from it.

Proof read!! Keep an eye out for proper use of commas and quotation marks, especially.

More fun

Poor little ellie I bet her bottom was so sore by the end of the week.

Slowly she turns, into his ultimate slave/slut. Another great chapter working a slow burn. I definitely look forward to reading more. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.