All Comments on 'Matrimonium Interuptus'

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Next up. Steve gets Miranda pregnant.

There were lots of problems with word selection and punctuation. I enjoyed the story, though.

Lots of holes in the story to say nothing about a reconciliation in light of the scope of her cheating. Moreover, this story sets a record for the most wordos, malapprops, misordered sentence structure, and “oxytocin” as a descriptor of sexual satisfaction, when it has nothing to do with sex act—it’s about child-birth.

I don't get the reconciliation or the total lack of anger at his wife. She treated him like shit, totally betrayed and disrespected him and then went off on a two week fuckfest with two other men and a woman.

No rage, no real anger or any real sense of betrayal demonstrated here. And no real justification for his forgiving and reconciling with her. Where is the basis or reason he should trust her again?

She got ran through by 4 guys and really had no valid reason. Why would he trust her after that? She said it wasn't a good experience for her as a reason she wouldn't do it again, but what if she just started thinking that she was just with the wrong four guys and tried again with another four? Her rationale for doing it the first time was off, so why trust her not to be that stupid again? Poor foolish Steve.

Wasn't Kathryn in bed with her one night stand when she got the hospital call....how then do you say she never had sex with anyone after the divorce!!

What about Rachel...her bitch aunt need some comeuppance

Utter horsehockey! She ‘loves him so much’ that she’s in bed with a one night stand when she gets the call from her daughter about him being in hospital!?!? Please. And he just forgives her total humiliation and emasculation of him because she finally acts like a human being???

5 stars. I am a BTB man. This story kind of got to me, so a 5 stars rating. Still think Kathy should have been dumped permanently and have Steve find someone else. Oh well, that's why I am not an author.

Funny how she loves him so much she is in bed with a lover when she gets the call to go to the hospital. Really willing to hold out for him, yah right.

Don't see any redeeming qualities of Kathy to take her back...

I liked it. The path was circuitous, but the characters were well developed and consistent in their behaviors. It all fit together very well. Katherine had a lot to overcome with Steve. She was fortunate that the women close to him were supportive despite the pain she’d made him suffer.

Really well thought out and executed, loved it

Excellent story although the end did feel a bit rushed. The tags helped and I knew from the outset that reconciliation was on the cards. As such I really liked the dynamics of the story. Well done, easy 5*.

Too much betrayal for a reconciliation. How could you take someone back that lied to you, planned and participated in a freaking orgy with her boss for how long was it two weeks? That's just too much. Of course they always regret it and see the light after the fact - what's new? She doesn't deserve Steve. Who's to say she won't do it again as it was apparently very easy to throw caution to the wind last time and just jump into the deep end of the adultery pool? Trust can never be restored as far as I'm concerned. All of her actions were simply out of guilt and trying to make herself feel better for her abhorrent behaviour during their marriage at the end of that. I swear every time a cheating wife says "I love you" I cringe. At this point it means nothing, like a token phrase you utter because it's the norm.

But science fiction certainly means fictions. And afterall, we were warned from the get-go: This story is pure fiction and has no relation to reality whatsoever."

In which case at least six out of five stars; possibly seven. On a good day with the wind in the right direction even eight for the most amusing ending.

Eh... no. Reconciliation felt forced. You need to investigate a bit more about a lot of details. Fiction, doesn't mean sci-fi.

Good start but the last couple pages just lost me. A bit too much. Thanks.

Thank you for the clearly marked RECONCILIATION Tag, dear Author! It was MUCH appreciated, so I flicked to the end to thank you!

R.S.

So the judge just rules that he cannot see Miranda for no reason, even if the mother had no problem with it? If you're going to just make things up why not add a lightsaber fight to the story?

The ending ruined it.

I NORMALLY WILL NOT EVEN READ A RAAC STORY, BUT MADE AN EXCEPTION FOR THIS ONE...NO REGRETS. CINCO ESTRELLAS!

Good story idea but so many holes in it and unneeded tangents, like the new babies.

Steve: "We're working on it, Little one. But there are some issues to be resolved. But I am convinced now that your mum made a mistake under pressure and regretted it ever since."

====> umm a nearly 2 week foursome orgy with your boss and another couple is a mistake under pressure, not to mention her outright lying? Ironically while she was pissed at hubby, she was also "vulnerable" to her boss, somehow caught up in "excitement", but in the end had a lot of sleazy, mediocre at best sex, despite her husband (at the time) being a highly skilled lover. Huh?

Not to mention that a judge while granting the mother full custody would in now way, block Steve from seeing her again. That is ridiculous. He was her step dad. If the mother agrees, Arrington some weird crap like prior record or being a registered sex offender, Miranda while having to live with her mother could be visited on a schedule or basis set by the ex wife. Yet somehow her hands were tied?

Then she loses control of Miranda, who is mournfully upset and her mother sucks at parenting, but then after Steve is hurt, then she takes care of him and they reconcile? I don't mind she had unfulfilling one night stands while divorced. That is her call. Doesn't set the tone for reconciliation but Steve gave no sense of ever taking her back. So meh. They are divorced. The bigger issue was Steve with no contact with Miranda.

But if the author wants a full reconciliation then reduce the level of the betrayal. Her premeditating, lying and going off for two weeks to screw her boss and another couple is ridiculous. That is not a one night or even one weekend thing with one guy, even ignoring possible circumstances of alcohol, drugs, blackmail, or sexual harassment.

No she had little to no respect for her husband, got seduced, lied, planned her betrayal, was excited about it, and by 10 days in was sick of the mediocre sex and then finally realized her epiphany that she had really heinously cheated on hubby, so make sure he doesn't find out. Except he did. Via his friends. Ergo she nuked her marriage.

That level of betrayal is similar to a multimonth affair meeting sat once a week. That means unless crazy circumstances (whatever crazy means, and is debatable how extreme), reconciliation is not possible. Regardless of Miranda who is already going on 16. So yeah if plan to reconcile then make the betrayal somewhat gray or something that can be rectified in time. This betrayal? Not just no, but hell no!

And what was the whole Rachel part? Could easily have set up some other event that gets him injured. Like maybe he saves a kid but gets hurt. Then all the impregnating of also Patricia and Noa? Wth?

Got weird sorry.

The Rachel story was both unnecessary especially once Patricia was introduced into the mix. The Patricia-Nora lesbians getting pregnant by the incredible lover the protaganist is has been over done and begs the question why did Kathryn find the need to fuck someone else in the first place

Great story, I really enjoyed reading it. Their is nothing like a Love Story to bring joy to my heart. Thanks for your writing.

FANTASTIC story!!!

Wonderful work! Congratulations!

Knowing the right word to use is important, as much as knowing how to spell it. You kept using wearily, the wrong word, instead of warily, the right word.

Wearily, adverb: with extreme tiredness.

Warily, adverb: cautiously; carefully.

Or it can mean: in a way that shows a lack of trust; suspiciously. (both meanings apply to your use in the story).

Also, tell me why, if all of Steve's trauma was to his torso, "His eyes are taped shut."? He had no head damage and his eyes were fine. What's the point of taping his eyes shut? *They* don't need to heal.

Last thing. If the students are all mid-teens and older, they're not exactly 'children' any more.

The Rachel plot line really didn’t serve much of a purpose. She created the conditions for Steve to get injured. But her resolution was ambiguous with daddy’s verbal spanking and offering Steve a job that he didn’t need.

Round and round in circles with no real satisfaction. This is a cuck story and not a good one.

The episode with Rachel was utterly unnecessary

What crap. Kathryn was so in love with Steve that she was boffing some guy when he was injured. Total garbage and unbelievable.

I was ready with 5 stars before you included two more women into the love equation. I don't believe this part would work in a real recovering relationship. 4 stars from Xluckylee

good but only 4stars as she was repentant but had to leave from sex to get to hospital

The whole Rachel subplot really hurts the story. I'm glad it didn't turn into an ice queen ending up with the divorcee after resolving her own misconceptions, but... she brought nothing to the story other than a contrived way for Kat to win her ex back. She could have been removed entirely, and the MC could have been injured in some other fashion to end up with the same story. 4.15*

The title should have read Matrimonium interruptum, not interruptus. Matrimonium is a latin substantive of neuter gender, not male.

YAWN, so much unnecessary FILLER, RACHEL was one big FILLER, not needed, the order you have words in sentences is odd, back to front.

Seven pages of a wimp unable to get over his infatuation with a gangbang slut. That's the summary. No matter how many descriptions of his muscles, his badassery and his intelligence we get, a wimp is still a wimp. Can't possibly describe a man willing to get past months of humiliation followed by his wife indulging in a 2 week orgy, as anything else. He deserves the next upcoming cucking and his adopted daughter following her mother footsteps (has already started on the path), while he remains a cuck.

The bit about Rachel was weird, it added nothing to the story, was left largely unresolved, and really didn't advance any character development. I felt more like the author was working through a grudge with a Rachel in real life.

I'm conflicted here: the story was badly edited and hardly believable, but, damn, I couldn't stop reading it.

I'm not investing 7 pages of reading for RAAC.

This is a Wonderful Erotic story of Love and Forgiveness. Miranda was the glue that kept things together when dealing with a broken relationship. Thank You! I’ll be checking out some of your other stories.

Well, a pretty good story.Some would call it an RAAC story but it wasn't, really. It took work and understanding and a woman that understood she made a terrible mistake. One who cheats on a marriage is cheating on the whole family and to me that is the most selfish and uncaring thing a person can do. I'm no saint and not perfect but I never cheated in my first marriage and never would have. If a person wants to cheat why get married or stay married? The ending kind of got carried away with impregnating the two good friends with his wife's consent. I'm 80 and in no way am I that liberal but other people have their own beliefs and morals and as long as they force their ways on me, live and let live has always been my way. 4 stars

This was a good story but for Rachel, she got off way to easy. She abandon her charges in a flood. Rachel did not communicate she was leaving the camp (actually lied to all) that caused Steve to risk his life for her and nearly was killed. What Rachel's dad was no where near enough. What did the school do to Rachel - never stated or than probation, she should have been on every shit duty possible, eraser cleaning, lounge cleaning, extra paper grading duties, overseeing detention and recess, conference(s) escort, PTA secretary, etc.

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4.7***** Hooyah, Salutes....

Rachel's fate was left undisclosed. She abandoned her students and thus wias derilect in her responsibility as a teacher chaperone on a school sanctioned trip into the wilderness. She then repeatedly lied about her actions. To allow her to get away with those misdeeds because her father is wealthy would be a terrible injustice and a horrible life lesson for every student who learned what had occurred. If Steve could be convinced to keep quiet by the offer of a cushy job in daddy's empire, he was not the paragon of ethics and personal responsibility that his reputation portrayed. His quasi-lesbian sperm seekers could do far better in their quest for a donor than someone so easily bribed into silence.

Good story, rushed into the betrayal, then rushed into the split up, then I felt it rushed into a conclusion. The fact was she cheated and was still doing ons when the reconciliation bus came along. All angst seemed to evaporate.

I really tried to get through this story. Made it mid-way through the third page and called it quits.

Normally I do not go for stories like this, reconciliation and sharing. With that said I think you did a wonderful job in tying it all together making it a great story. 5 Stars.

It was a good effort, but i'm reluctantly unable to give it more than 2 stars. There were 4 big problems with the story:

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1. RAAC. She didn't deserve him back, and had done absolutely nothing to prove that she changed or to earn him back. Taking care of him for a couple of weeks while he was injured isn't NEARLY enough.

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2. She wasn't punished for her treacherous backstabbing NOR for her cruel treatment of him, in any way shape or form. Yeah he divorced her, but then the idiot took her back.

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3. "You took care of Miranda, even after that judge kicked you out of her life. That wasn't my doing. I never asked for that. Stupid judge.". This sounds like a complete and utter load of bullshit. The judge may remove his right to DEMAND to see Miranda. There is absolutely ZERO probability the judge has any ability to prevent Miranda from seeing him if both Miranda and the cheating slut asswipe wanted it to happen; and clearly Miranda would. So, the only reason he had no access to Miranda was the cheating slut asswipe. No way she can blame the judge.

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4. While at it, the spoiled bitch should have been prosecuted for abandoning the kids. She was a school representative and responsible for them MORE than Steve was. Yeah the fact that she lost her daddy's money was nice but nowhere NEAR enough what she deserved.

Yes, it was disappointing to have no follow up for Rachel, but I guess she served her purpose in getting the hero in hospital. If he had already adopted the daughter, I don't see how the judge could have stripped him of his parental rights. Still, I gave you five stars.

She treated them badly for months and then left for a two week orgy vacation. Hard to get past that to the RAAC.

4*. Would have been 5 except for the Rachel loose end.

This was a good story in spite of the horrible grammar. I'm glad that I stuck with it but it wasn't easy. Usually, when the grammar is this amateurish, the story is bad as well. Thankfully, that wasn't the case here. I would say you need better editing, but it isn't right to blame the editor because the editor would have to change practically every sentence in the story. You really need to learn some basic English writing skills to go along with the good story telling.

I really want to know if there is a redemption arc for Rachel.

Five stars thank you for sharing your talent with us.

Enjoyable story!

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Excellent story...

...5 stars is a no-brainer from here.

I liked it. The lot's of detail in the story telling. However, reconcilation stories don't fair well here. That said. 5 stars. Looking forward to more from this aurthor.

It's a good story, but I'm not convinced. What happened to Miranda's father? And if she was 'pining' for her lost love, what was she doing in bed with her latest one-night stand?? This broad is a cheater looking to happen. But as a guy, I can't complain too much at having been given a cornucopia of sexual excess- even if only one time. It was only one time, wasn't it?? Steve was a stand-up guy with good friends. But still just a guy. SO...... 3 stars, the Bear liked the sex parts. Try again. Your writing is good.

The BEAR

You guys sure do like to paint with a wide brush. There is a very big difference between a cuck who is disrespected, abused and lied to and a man who is able to forgive a remorseful and truly repentant woman. I wonder if you will have the same black and white perspective of no tolerance, no grace, no forgiveness when you are standing before God in judgment.

There are too many loose ends. What abot Rachel? Did she suffer? Did Steve climb again? Is it an open marriage now?

Kinda dropped the Rachel character in the middle there. Not that she deserved any better.

Just wore me out reading it, couldnt get past page 5...

…shortly thereafter Steve was named the first living saint and is now an advisor to the Vatican.

Started skimming once it was clear the plot was not Steve finding a new love but another story of a cuckold reconciling the town cum dumpster.

Would have been more creative story if Steve had refused the request from Kathryn’s parents to meet with them and Kathryn to save Miranda, stating “I have a court order to stay out of her life. If Kathryn needs help then she should call her rich fuck buddies.”

Only part that I liked was Steve making sure Kathryn kept her job thus saving himself alimony payments.

This story is a prime example of why you can’t judge a story by its score. I guess a lot of the readers on this site aren’t too discerning. This was so monotonous and filled with errors. The author seemed to wander off on different tangents.

A very long and tedious read. Sorry but I had to bail on this convoluted tale after about 4 pages. The author insisted on detailed dialogue concerning unimportant details. This extended the story considerably and contributed to the story flow being interrupted constantly. No score because I couldn’t finish it

I am sooo very glad I only skimmed this pathetic piece of shit. Yeah, grammar was atrocious and premise is not believable at all. He's got 2 weeks of her being screwed over ad over and all he can come up with how much he loves her? Bullshit.

With.all due apologies sir, you are trying too hard. It just got utterly ridiculous. I couldnt finish. Too unrealistic. I like your writing style, but you need to live in reality. I will watch for new stories on hopes of progress. Still giving you 5 stars because feedback needs to be encouraging. There is a great story in you, this just wasnt it.

See, SEE? The whore fucking around just made the relationship and the marriage stronger, eventually. Try it at home, and let me know how it works out for you.

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Actually, if the whore is really rehabilitated and the stupid cuck doesn't have any better option, why not? What has he got to lose? They didn't even need any counseling. And the whore was still a promiscuous slut until she got the phone call about her stupid cuck needing her. He's getting what he's marrying, so he deserves whatever he ends up getting, even if that is screwed over, again. Its like living with a time bomb. Hope he enjoys it.

Nicely done. Hartelijk dank.

Your English is quite good, but the story would have benefitted from another pre-post read by a native English speaker. There were a number of little things amiss, but the thing that distracted me was your referring to Miranda and her friends as “children.” She was about sixteen and, in the US at least, we would have referred to her group of friends as “kids;” “children” would generally be younger than teenage. (There are exceptions. If you ask someone if they have “children,” the answer would be “yes,” even if those ”children” are now adults and even parents themselves. Languages ARE complex!)

Again, bedankt.

Mediocre. Not sure what the point was of the camping story.

In reality she neither respected or loved him. She proved it. Why would it be different this time.

How could judge forbid contact? Can't do that. Makes no sense.

Where was story supposed to be? If usa too many terms were incorrect. Trauma not shock team. The way you referred to teachers and principals is incorrect.

We're getting along quite nicely and I know you love me, but I'm damaged goods now and have trust issues. And no, that's not all your fault."

How is it not all her fault? Completely her fault.

Not very well done. I commend the author for trying but much of the writing is stilted and awkward. The entire sub-plot of Rachel was a distraction. Yes, I understand that the author needed an excuse to throw the MC and Kathryn together so they could reconcile, but the Rachel story line seems particularly forced and badly contrived. And why do so many writers in the LW category make the husband the paragon of all virtues and the straying wife the slut of the world? Steve is portrayed as a faultless genius with all the attributes women supposedly want in a man: sensitive, caring, loving, great with children, brilliant, devoted, hard bodied, a big dick that he knows how to use. So why does she cheat? Because some rich asshole puts down her husband for supporting her work ambitions so she turns on hubby and fucks the boss? That's it? Really?

Maybe an interesting story would be the seduction of Kathryn and some explanation as to why she would whore herself out and betray a guy who is literally the best husband material ever. But as presented in this story, there never would be a reconciliation since the only explanation would be that Kathryn is a mindless slut who never could be trusted not to cheat again.

So, a very pedestrian story line that has been done here thousands of times. Kudos for the author to have the courage to write and publish this story, but 3*** for a tired-out story line with cardboard characters and awkward writing.

Good until the very end with all the Poly stuff. That seemed over-the-top and out of character with the rest of the story. I would have ended it with the reconciliation. Just saying.

Excellent story and worthy of 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS! Very well written Josh.

A rare really well written cheating fairytale, with an unbelievable ending RAAC, but ... this time well deserved and justifiable. A good plot, with many twists, not filled with useless filler just to make a tale longer. Very much different from the usual cheating tales, with some content belonging to other categories: lesbian, fetish-cuck and fetish-cuckqueen. All in all, a well balanced, not boring just-sex tale, with a good realistic plot, even though too much fairytale in the end. So, 5+ full stars. Good job.

Great story! I really enjoyed it! DerMtMan

The teacher seemed like she was going to get a big part but was essentially killed off. I'd imagine the author might've wanted it to go her way at one point then at the last minute, made it into a RAAC story. Too bad the teacher didn't get a chance to find out who Steve really was and get humbled.

The medical parts of this story (the shock team and shock room!?!) Were so bad it made my eyes bleed.

an illiterate author is bad enough, but a RAAC too? oh, hell no.

I agree, great story. Too bad Miranda wasn’t present to witness the conceptions.

The two biggest problems in amateur writing are hyperbole and overwriting. Hyperbolic characters and action are what results from everything in drama, being a cartoon, either by design or through execution. There's no longer any nuance. I didn't like Steve because the only people that perfect have serious personality issues: sociopathic or over-compensatory. Maybe both.

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The scene on Bird Island was just unbelievable because they were so obvious, and how did they NOT see everyone running around with a telephoto of about a zillion millimeters focal length? Why make it so obvious? Reduce some of the other scenes and expand this one. Create some tension and conflict in other spots.

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The overwriting is because you have no editor or a weak one who says, "Tha's cool, Braw!" Editing is collaborative, sometimes contentious, and always necessary. A large part of this story went adrift with details that didn't add to the story.

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Everyone's reactions were predictable, which doesn't make for a good story. If you read enough of these cheating wife stories, they all have the same plot, the same characters, the same language, and the same tropes. Yes, there will be similarities due to the limits of the LW category but dare to get away from the easy, lazy writing techniques and write some conflicted characters. Include some dead ends that make MC doubt what he knows, or thinks he knows. The highlight of this story was when the mother-in-law told the 14-year-old Miranda to back off her mother a bit. When that's the most memorable part of a story, you're in a formula-induced rut.

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You're a great storyteller but stretch yourself. Avail yourself of some of the tens of thousands of writing improvement resources.

I loved Rachel's presence and found her bitchiness to be the perfect foil to get us to accept Kathryn's redemption.

Just would have liked a bit more of what happened to Rachel later... perhaps a follow up story?

reading these stories is like reading a form letter.

Very good, A new favorite of mine.

Kind of okay. Others have made the point about Rachel. There’s also the judge’s decision cutting Steve out of Miranda’s life. That made no sense on any level. Then there’s the sappy sexual sharing at the end. Totally unrealistic. It’s a good way to destroy marriages.

I disagree with many of the comments below regarding Rachel. It was necessary to replace Noa as Miranda's mentor with a less involved person to allow her to fully spiral out of control and force Steve to be allowed back in her life. Besides her eventual role in getting Steve hurt so that Kathryn could benefit from the Florence Nightingale Effect, she also served as a nice red herring as I'm sure that many anticipated him taming the wild beast that she was. Heck, I was one of those who expected she would stagger from her flooded tent and end up naked in Steve's tent needing his body warmth to survive...

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No, the character that I think was mishandled in the story was Rachel's father. That was a needless subplot that didn't really add much. So, he now has a part time job we know nothing about and didn't have any impact on the story? Yes, I know that it was intended to tie up the loose ends with Rachel, but I think it failed overall as it left more threads than it tied off.

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Actually, I think the judge was also poorly portrayed. While I have no doubt that many a judge has denied visitation to a (step)father, I've never heard of one doing so without a request from the mother. It just didn't fit with how it was described that Kathryn handled her side of the divorce. Also, it is mentioned later that he had adopted Miranda, so he would have had the same rights as a biological father would, so the "not actually the father" bit was not actually the case. Yes, I know, plot armor...

Very nice, thank you. 5+ stars

This is just awful. Loose ends every which way, all over the place, stodgy writing at best. I can't count the word error, participle, and tense-agreement problems.

Was striving for 5 in the early going…..dropped to a 4 in tne middle….and crashed to a 3 with tne loopy ending.

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Setup was good. But then the divorce happened in a blink of an eye with zero confrontation — and then a judge goes rogue and denies Steve access to Melinda? And later we learn Kathy didn’t want that? Yet absolutely no explanation.

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Post divorce we jump almost 2 years ahead and Melinda not doing good…so ex in-laws get Steve signed up to be her guardian? WTF? And THEN story goes off the rails. The bitch school “mentor” is introduced….and for what? But she is used as a plot device to get Steve injured so that girlfriend and ex wife can “rescue” him. But girlfriend only wants sex from Steve…not a relationship. But wait! She’s a latent lesbian! Who later hooks up with Steve’s friend! Meanwhile, Kathy manages to reel Steve back in! But wait! She’s OK if Steve impregnates the lesbians!

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Sorry…but this plot just became a huge mess in the second half of the story. So it averages out to a

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3 ***

This was good, but Rachel and her father's involvment didn't make that much sense

3 stars. Definitely, a fantasy RAAC. Story holes big enough to drive a bus through.

I wanted to like this, but entirely too many inconsistences, errors and fabrications. No child calls their parents by their first names, also no judge refuses custody or visitation unless the parent is in prison or a clear danger to the child's well-being. Also, you made it seem like Miranda was a child, yet she was also a assistant school principal? A lot of this made ZERO sense. I understand that English is most likely NOT your first language, but the use of an editor and proofreader would do you wonders.

I liked it.

Four stars, for a tale well told. However, you could use the services of a good proofreader. There were far too many unforced errors usually wrong words (chance should have been change, etc.) Also, you had numerous sentence structure issues. Other than that, not a bad tale, ignoring plot holes including whatever became of Rachel. Did she ever grow as a person?

JPB

Did Dr. Albertsons have a sex change?

Compliments for your excellent command of the English language. Only few small errors ("from" instead of "about" or "of") hinted that you are not a native speaker. Myself, I will never reach that level.

As for the story, I sneaked to the last page to find out wether it was BTB or reconciliation (bad habit of mine!). Driven by couriousity how in heaven you would get those two together again I read through this long story and wasn't disappointed; the outcome is believable.

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Why would the divorce have necessitated cutting off contact with daughter? If Mom had truly been so remorseful, she wouldn't have acted that way. The judge wouldn't have just decided it out of the blue, so it felt very contrived.

You get all five stars because I pay for entertainment

Very nice and well-written story. I thought it kind of petered out at the end.

Ed

Not quite my cup of tea, but cleverly done how you mask the RAAC by inserting Rachel as a potential love interest in the middle part of page 2 of a 7 page story where the reveal and divorce happened on the 1st page. The last page with all that free love going on had me hoping the author wouldn't make it any worst by writing a incest scene in there as well. So thank goodness for small mercies.

interesting and winding story but with characters created then left out of the final closure of the telling.