All Comments on 'Max and the Lamp'

Good to see a new writer. Get and editor or proof read a little ... Jenny, Jessica, Ivy, Mom.... needs tidying... also watch 1st and 3rd person... a few swapsies here and there.

so what is max's mum name?ivy or jessica?

at some point you even changed max sister

name from jenny to ivy,you need to pay

attention to details.3 stars.

5 stars. looking forward to the sequel. Mom will be fun. and I am sure mom and sis will have a bit of getting to know each other as well. Then there is the girlfriend from the beach as well. Great starter chapter.

MORE PLEASE !!!!!!!

Good story, need more which Mama and sis together.

Not for me.

Fun first chapter. Bring on chapter 2

Too quick, not much of a plot.

Ivy or Jenny

So a rape story by a fucking lamp. I'll pass 1 star

Although this is a fantasy incest story, the suster did not have free will to determine her actions. Rape is never love. Am I being to serious?

You've got a good idea going, but you've not built on it properly. There's also the problem of the wrong names used, at one point you've mixed up Jenny and Ivy and you introduce the name Jessica without any tie in to it.