by phsssst
great read ty ... evocative and heartwarming ... unusual for this particular type of story
"her steamy swamp of viscous slime"
wow...that just sounds so tempting
I think maybe you should buy a dictionary
Very moving story, different from the usual in this category. There were a few typos and word choices that detracted from the story; those can be easily fixed with the use of a good editor. Keep up the good work and continue writing for this category even if it is a departure from your usual.
This was a rape, but in some wort of bizarre way, it morphed into a romantic piece. As for the speling errors, they are bound to happen. In this case they did not detract from the story.
it was a good story, but could be tremendously improved if you consulted either a dictionary or an editor. you misused quite a few words and it was distracting to me. you have potential here, though. don't give up.
I loved the story! It's so nice to find a writer that takes care with spelling and grammar! My only complaint is that, although it wasn't difficult for me to read, some of the "bigger words" almost seemed extraneous. It's close to sounding like you just used an online thesaurus a thousand times. I also wish I could get to know your characters a bit better because you make them so intriguing. Other than that, I gave you a 5 for a refreshing and interesting read.
Loved the story! Fantastic vocabulary you have! Hope to see more of your stories!