by wallcleaner
Extremely well-written. Premise is unbelievable of course but you make it sound typical as you draw the reader in. Deserves multiple chapters.
Hot and truthful. Have him fuck some of your coworkers and let the men watch
Good story. I liked the slow but detailed pace that kept the reader hooked.
Disappointed you gave her a tube cut - so much hotter when there is pregnancy risk sex! At least let her dau get properly flooded.
Drop the mythology and racist lies about nonexistent BBC and the effect it has on otherwise sentient women of other races. You don't need that to write a compelling story, you've proven that in other stories, without this bullshit.