All Comments on 'Megan'

it's hot and quick! but the first few paragraphs seem to be in the guys perspective then shift to the girl perspective (maybe giving the other girl, not Megan, a name would help). or give the guy a name to clarify it's not his perspective.

but I like the ideas, descriptions, and the acts! keep on writing!

Thanks for the feedback: yes, the intent is to be efficient, to move the narrative forward.

i get that it' may be difficult to follow who is who, will work on that.

For eference: First person narrator is male, "you" is the character from "How it started", "she/her" is Megan, the new introducion.

Going from first to second person narrative between chapters was imho a bad choice - it killed the story for me.

Thanks for the feedback. Was going for efficiency in narration, and accept it may be confusing. Trying to tighten it up as i go from here.

Again -this is only a first person narrative, but the narrator describes what his partners see / do.