All Comments on 'Memory Deficit'

That was enjoyable, thanks.

I don't agree with the premise of the family being innocent in all this. A fair read but something was lacking. Had it not been a serious affair of someone getting nearly killed, it would've made a good comedy of errors. 4* for the bold endeavour to write and publish.

enjoyable but when she said she went too far with Mike just how far did she go?

one of the worst stories i have had the misfortune to read

A bit messy but ultimately settled on a 4, above average, as it was an interesting read. I'm not sure I buy the lack of a conspiracy by his wife and kids, they were just so blatant about everything. Why was the PI lying too? Overall not bad, I really thought it would turn out that the kids weren't his and Dani had a long term affair with Mike or something along those lines.

Sorry to say this one missed the mark, by some way. Really messy and unconvincing story and characters, which I'd a shame from a generally good author.

+1 to the previous comment.

Also the kids need to be grounded.

Maybe I’m just strange but I love this one. Hilarious. Doesn’t take itself seriously. Great little romp!

train wreck....

Some funny bits but all in all, this is the literary equivalent of eating a shit sandwich.

You develop plot points only to come out and say "that's not a plot point!".

So, after all this contorted shenanigans nothing significant happened? This piece need help.

Thanks any way for your effort. 1

Not happening!!

Humor is supposed to be in there But just stupid.

Slapstick I outgrew when became an adult. Some never do so I can understand the good comments But I wasted my time hoping it would finally be humorous

[11.08.23]

Funny Stuph!

Looove the pop culture refs:

1) "I wasn't completely happy with the much bigger Lebowski Total Auto Service place that I had used before."

2) Nurse Ratched

3) W. E. Coyo

11/10!!!!!

A hoot.

only 4 stars because there is written that a PT Cruiser is wonderful car. It might be meant to be funny but it still means one star deduction.

That was a good one. A lot going on, but everything ended well. I don’t think I would ever trust Dani though.

LOL, what a great farce

Hilarious farce. Crazy. But entertaining. Like how everyone assumed he had amnesia but he didn't.

Funny how so many commenters ignore the humor and the zany rug pulls but insist the wife had to be cheating. Roll. It is fiction.

Very humorous story that could have been hilariously funny without all the distracting subplots. Four stars anyway, because it's very hard to write comedy without being a comedian beforehand.

I could see this as a one off hour of TV, so silly it worked.

Good one.

Pretty good far e. Four stars. It got a bit too silly, but I guess that's what a farce is.

JPB

Good plot and pretty funny. Somewhat lengthy intro though.

For me, too long and contrived, i got bored and went to see what happened at the end, it still didnt seem like the mc was doing anything.

i had to check to see if hdk was'nt the authur of the "master piece"

Totally insane LW's comedy. Brilliant really. Bravo 👏 5 🌟's

Funny story. His kids? Sure setup a trust for education costs based on grades. In his will? Setup trusts that his kids can’t access until they’re 40. The wife? Make her sign a postnup as a condition of having spending money.

One question! How many magazines, manuals, novels, guides, instructions, have you read with dot dot dots in every sentence and WTF is meant by a dot dot dot at the beginning of a sentence. Up to my last day teaching college level English Literature, I'd never seen any one use it. If you don't leave a space after the third dot when listening to your story by a Text reader you hear every one of those dots. Ruins a good story like your. Had I received a manuscript on my desk written like this while during my 12 years as the Editor in Chief, it would have ended up in the dumpster and I'd have paddled my Secretaries ass. Excellent story but too many bad habits by other story tellers at Literotica. Still going to give this 5 stars. Install Text Aloud and use it to write your story and have it read it back to you and you'll hear every mistake you made. Pause and change anything or add, maybe backspace over something you want to get rid of. Most important, you'll hear how dot dot dots ruin your story.

Pretty darn funny. Some zany twists. The drip feed of lies and then truth was hilarious as the MC kept reacting. In the end the wife never cheated. She had a crazy plan to break the prenuptial and thought Mike was a genuine friend on her side. But of course after the amnesia Mike makes his intentions clear and she is confused, then worried, then confesses to save her husband from an incoming exploding banana. Fitting death for Mike. Liked the side plot murd we attempt with Detective Cook, of which the wife was wholly innocent and had zero knowledge. The part about scraping the stone was hilarious and his reaction great. Kids are a mess. 4 stars. Some of it got a bit tortuous.

Death by 🍌 oops mnmnm.... Yummy

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I suspected the twist before it was finally revealed, but it didn't diminish my enjoyment of the short story. Very funny and very clever. 5/5

Funny stuff. How the wife was reacting to the fake amnesia at first had me rolling. 5/5

Humor is apparently wasted on a lot of readers here on Lit. Smh.

Loved the exploding banana and how it ended one of the MC's problems. Seemed kind of strange that the wife went from slow talking to her husband to because of his amnesia to confronting him that he really didn't have amnesia. Lots of red herrings thrown around but it ended well. Four stars for the chuckles.

Ending was a weak and pointless.

Should have used the ever golden classic Diesel Chevette to trap the mechanic.

That was funny lol.

Still laughing.

I don't pay for the stories and so try to show respect for those who generally keep me entertained.

While cuck stories don't appeal or interest me, I even accept we all have different tastes.

This then is an oddity, it is a story that has totally defeated me and I regret I'll never get the time back. The humour escaped me, and all I'm left wondering is where is this place that Tom was for a period of time preceding the accident?

Hehe. Weird but at times quite funny. 4 stars