All Comments on 'Mia Gets Her Man'

Could use some editing, but there's something about this simple little story that seems very honest, and that's something I really like, so I'm giving it a five.

Yeah I agree your story could do with editing.

I like the description of the sex scene and your story is plausible...Good job

I was so disappointed to see the end of the story.

MORE!

Please finish the story, love is on the horizon...

Loved the story just had issues with the going back and forth with the present and past tense.

That was hot!!!

I was a bit disappointed that he pretty much told her she was his black experiment. There were some spelling and grammatical errors. I would definitely read more of your work.

love it more

but hot as hell. Want more please.

It was interesting, but I didn't like the switching back with the tenses, and I was not happy that she was his little "experiment," but this isn't my story -- is it? Keep writing!

Great writing I loved it