All Comments on 'Mia Gets Her Man'

Great writing I loved it

It was interesting, but I didn't like the switching back with the tenses, and I was not happy that she was his little "experiment," but this isn't my story -- is it? Keep writing!

but hot as hell. Want more please.

love it more

I was a bit disappointed that he pretty much told her she was his black experiment. There were some spelling and grammatical errors. I would definitely read more of your work.

That was hot!!!

Loved the story just had issues with the going back and forth with the present and past tense.

Please finish the story, love is on the horizon...

MORE!

I was so disappointed to see the end of the story.

Yeah I agree your story could do with editing.

I like the description of the sex scene and your story is plausible...Good job

Could use some editing, but there's something about this simple little story that seems very honest, and that's something I really like, so I'm giving it a five.