by suidward
Dont listen to the lynch mob. Keep on writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Makes the story sound like it's being written by an eighth-grader. Or a comic book author. Which, emotionally speaking, would be approximately equivalent.
If the sex scene wasn't so rushed, with minimal detail. A slow seduction/undressing of him by the two women might have been more erotic, as well as more specific detail in the too short sex scene itself.
i read all of your stories. i cant think of anyone who has ever put as many stupid pieces of writing on this web. i dont really think you have ever come closer than your hand to getting off.
They didn't give him any advice! Guess there's going to have to be a sequel where they show the girlfriend how to relax.
Pretty hot stuff.