All Comments on 'Ch. 01: Mikvah Night'

If I may make one suggestion, it would be to delete about 90% of the adjectives and adverbs. There is a dizzying number of them, so many that sometimes the sense of the sentence is lost. Less is more.

Another good one! Don't change the way you write. It's hot!

I second the vote on having too many adjectives. Otherwise nice