All Comments on 'Modified Ch. 03'

Really good so far, a couple of spelling and grammar errors but so small I almost didn’t want to mention them, but as a writer I’m sure your interested if only to make the work better. Looking forward to the next chapter or chapters to see where the story takes us.

I’m writing and proof reading this on an iPad app, and I get annoyed when the final text goes out and I miss something. I truly appreciate you taking the time to mention this, but mostly I’m pleased that they get in the way of your enjoyment. This is my first story published anywhere, and I’m grateful for the patience of the readers.

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Nice one