All Comments on 'Mom Unlocks the Shyness Enigma'

Very good start. I want to read more. 5 stars.

It was well written, and certainly a bit "different" dmallord. However, forgive me if I say I don't think it merits an 'H' rating. Bravo anyway!

interesting start.

Top quality story. More plot twists than usual on this subject. I look forward to a continuation, if possible. 5 stars!

I look forward to the next chapter of this story

Excellent, well written story. I wonder if the father will join in at some point? Will his mother admit that James also knows the meaning of the tat to her husband? Lots of possibilities with this story. 5 stars

I enjoyed reading this story very much. I hope that it continues.

That was fun! You built your story like a puzzle, revealing bits and pieces of what was going on as the story progressed, like when you yada yada yadaes the anal sex with mom, only to revisit it in his thoughts, explaining what went down. Or UP!

While this story doesn’t say Part One anywhere, I definitely think it needs a Part Two- we don’t yet know just how clued in Dad is about it all, nor do we know how Thor(!) fairs with the fairer sex at large. Please consider it!

Thanks for writing! As i say: fun!

Well done solid flow ,please continue the story .for further story's you will need to broaden your caricter base.

Loved the different type of story line. Can't wait for the upcoming sequels.

Next chapter

5 starsà hope yiu write more, and often.

I think Teresa Ann has set up this all it's interesting to see what's coming next

I liked this very natural in the way James adapted to the situation.

Mom needs a baby in her belly.

I like the way you handle this story, it has me excited to read more about " James Herbert Bond' and his mother and Teresa Ann.

Not bad! 4 stars

Great story my star rating does not seem to be working. 5 stars

Very interesting story. I like the premise and setting. More chapters please.

Oh my ! Keep them coming.

Didnt like it. It is 3 pages long and I stopped after a page and a half.

Show, don't tell. It's the difference between "So we had sex" vs. describing the scene in detail. I like the concept though. Also, you need to make paragraph breaks more often. Reading large blocks of dense text on a computer screen/tablet/phone can be hard on the eyes.

A great idea for a story, but I’m afraid you’re not telling it very well. You use first person but the action is almost described outside of the character’s experience. There’s no descriptions of what an action feels like from the characters point of view. Also, the keyhole symbol is very closely tied to BDSM or master/slave dynamics, with a heavy undercurrent of misogyny - which is fine if that’s your thing, but that doesn’t fit with the characters you’re working with. It’s like you read about something online and inserted it into your story without understanding what any of it meant.

I enjoyed that and mom/son isn't usually my bag. I'll read some more.

This is strange. You take care to tell us how shy and insecure this virginal guy is and when he gets to have sex for the first time, you just skip it all - not a word about what he did, how he felt, or what this woman taught him, and go to two hours later. And then suddenly he's asking his mom if she's ever been butt-fucked??

Interesting story, need at least a second chapter. It would also be interesting to get a story that fills in the tease of Teresa Ann's back story with her father.

I don't get this. Your writing is very good technically. You take pains to tell us what a shy, meek, inexperienced virgin this guy is. When the neighbor seduced him, it should have been an earth-shattering, amazing experience but we read not a word about it. Not a single detail about what they did. You just go to "two hours later." And then he's suddenly asking his mom if she'd ever been butt-fucked?

Interesting story, but not impressed with totally skipping Thor's first time sex. Maybe try again, and get someone to write the sex seans for you.