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All Comments on 'Mom's Friend Takes Control Pt. 01'

by eddie_winter

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KallMeTTKallMeTTalmost 4 years ago

Nice beginning but it really leaves the reader hanging. Need parts 2, 3, 4.....

dispatcher59dispatcher59almost 4 years ago
Needs more

This is a good start, but you could have at least had Eddie and Sharon reach a conclusion. A pre bed hand job would have been a nice finish to a short story. Otherwise, nicely done.

UltimateHomeBodyUltimateHomeBodyalmost 4 years ago

Wait longer and write a decent length before uploading. The pace you set for this means you are more than half way through anyway.

OligarcOligarcalmost 4 years ago
Great Start

Amazing plot hook. Can’t wait to read more!

WillieTurnerWillieTurneralmost 3 years ago

Good set up for a longer story!

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

And ...?!

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Long time reader, novice writer. I hope you enjoy my writing. Would love to hear your feedback.

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