All Comments on 'Mom's Surprise Birthday Party Ch. 05'

Fucking grea! Take my 5 stars!

Maybe the roommate and the other guy have an accident that leaves them dead or with amnesia but it’d be better dead eliminate all loose ends lol

Trust Me I would have the roommate and his friend Killed by a Drunk Driver ..

Tell truth had my mom divorce my dad and we both bought house together and my mom went back to her maiden name.said plan marrying my own son then said that she wanted kids with me.i had turned her into my personal slut and whore knocked her up twice.until one day I set up surprise gangbang in hotel room with six black guys.once got room told spending time to ourselfs.once we walked in she saw the guys and I said surprise slut they here to rape fuck you put black in you.told guys rape this fucking whore ripped her clothes she screamed when they got her once done she was really used told her how my fucking slut now and she yelled bastard you made sure I got fucked good and hard.told her like the part put two large cocks in your hairy cunt and cum in it.she pregnancy test she had black kid in her that makes number three in her.so every mom should let their sons fuck them let them put their kid in you

I dont get the blackmailing part. There is no reason for her to agree to it, probably just a fantasy of the author. It was just a waste chapter imo and the fsct that she never taled about it with her son makes it even more weird.

The entire story felt really weird with no clear red line, like the author had no clue what he's going to write at all.

Brilliant story very well written. Thank you.

Wonderful story! I really would like to see an epilogue!

Bravo

You wrote an interesting story. I loved how you set up their initial meeting. I enjoyed reading it but couldn’t help but wonder if you went to school in California as you grammar, verb tense and misspellings were very distracting from your story. Please get an editor or if you have one, get a better one. I would have given you 5 stars for a better edited story. Keep up the good work. MtM

The kidnapping scene in chapter one was awful. That would traumatize any woman for her entire life, not make her horny. After that, the chapter was pretty hot, especially when she realized it was him and told him to continue!

Chapter 2 was OK, chapter 3 was awful. In chapter 4 you saved it by turning it into a nightmare, which was awkward, but better than how 3 ended.

Chapters 4 and 5 were so much better! You really brought the story around, and I enjoyed both of those more than the other 3 chapters combined.

Great series. I had an issue with the rape deem; however, that is one of those things that turns me off and even makes me a little, ok, real mad, because of past experience. This could go further and find that dad has been cheering all this time and is why he has been working late all the time. Keep writing, please.

Good story but would like to see how it goes after mothersday.

Personally, I would have liked to see the wankers that raped his mother appropriately drawn and quartered especially, now they got away with it, they will do it again.

Too bad it has been so long since this was written would enjoy seeing where this went after mother's day.