All Comments on 'Moving Day Ch. 03'

Maybe I'm wrong (I've been wrong before) but I'm only giving this chapter 75. It's not that your writing skills have diminished (Your still a damn good writer) but the story itself is getting a little far fetched.

I'm totally in love with Chrysta (I loved exhibitionists) but a story needs credibility too. It's a very tough thing to do. I know, since I'm already starting to fuck up my own series of stories, but just because I do it doesn't make it right.

If we both calm down and use sex scenes in the story as an added enticement for the reader, instead of writing a story where the sex scenes are the purpose of the story, I think we could write a more erotic story.

Like I began, I might be wrong. MY stories have elicited very little comment from the readers, so.....?