All Comments on 'Moving Linda Ch. 01'

Your standard of writing is around that of a 14 year old schoolboy!

For instance, in the fourth paragraph - "When I lost my wife 3+ years ago to a heart attack." This 'sentence' is incomplete and meaningless!

Or, how about the last 'sentence'?

" I'm know I'm looking forward to it."

Pathetic!!!

I thought your characters are nice people. I can easily imagine them in my life. I would love to read more about them. Frankly, I was a little put off by the comment that could only see grammar or spelling issues; I figured out your intent, I'm sure. So find a friendly editor. No big deal. Keep up the good work.

Potentially a good story, but poorly written in this version.

Would love to read some more please