by RockStarGod
Crossovers are bad on tv and also in literature. This story seems like an excuse to have a crossover to say you did it. Characters feel wooden. Fall in love in like an hour of total time spent together? Not a believable plot
It is good writing, an interesting plot.... but for my values, the women Damian came in contact with are cheap. I do not care for women who are so loose to not only fall in bed with a man just met, but to even initiate it. This type of woman, as noted, would not be faithful wives..... no, not so much....
I didnt finish chapter one because a threesome with people you just met is anything but a romance. This on the other hand is more to my liking. I enjoyed your "American Count" series, and it is cool to see the characters again. I will be following this one as well. So what if it's unrealistic? I consider this a guilty pleasure, a "Lifestyles of the Rich and Famous" in text form if you will.
Excellent writing.
This seemed rushed. Also how much of a party girl is she?
A 3 way with someone you just met would give a guy pause when considering if a girl was long term material.
Still very nice story and I liked the main character. You wrote him well.