All Comments on 'Mrs. Robinson's April Fool'

whew

glad it was just role-playing by the couple

nice fantasy no third wheel.

use as a cathartic way by the couple to ease stress from work

this kind marriage is going to last I surmise.

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good story ErosOJoy

but sorry I did skipped a lot of paragraphs

because I thought the MC was one cheating bastard

nice twist in the end.

Stupid story…repeated so many times taht it no longer holds any attention!

Loved your Story ! As a fan of my partner wearing Stockings and Heels I loved the first Lovemaking . But WHY roll down the Stockings , Why take off the Garter Belt for the second . The feel of Stockings rubbing on my bare leg ? Exquisite . My hands on the hips , rubbing the Satin Garter Belt ? Amazing !

Really enjoyed your Style , am going to have a binge on the rest ! Many Thanks !

Perhaps I may be seen as a dick BUT... the dozens and dozens of word and spelling errors greatly detract from the quality of the story. Please get an editor or just someone to "look over" and correct the basic errors.

Other than that, keep writing. The more you write, the better you will get, as long as you take on board constructive comments. Cheers.

Well done. D

Very slight deviation from a common storyline. It’s a short story filled with way too many errors. An editor or second reader would surely help.

Funny slapstick! Was fun to read! 5*!

You could also call it "the little man's revenge" or "therapy with a difference"! In any case, it was good for the soul!

Learn to break up your stories into readable paragraphs. They wordy and go on for so long it's hard to maintain interest.

It was okay . Saw it coming.

got me. Loved it

Meh. The twist was obvious early.

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Needs editing. Missing words, missing commas.

Very well done. Great psychology and finish.

Somehow I just knew it was a role play tale.

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It was OK. But not good enough to brag about.

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3 ***

Well done.

Kinda saw that coming, but it was a fun read. A little role play can spice things up, but I wouldn’t make it a requirement for an enjoyable experience. Thanks for sharing.

Had my doubts at first--too convenient, too pat a storyline. There's always some "suspension of belief" to fantasy creations on the Literotica website but this? Mrs. Robinson? True appreciation of the pun required a knowledge of that '67 Mike Nichols' film The Graduate, and many readers might not have that memory of nearly 60 years ago. But it grew on me. Of course the plot didn't replicate that of the film, but it was enough mention to trip the memory, which added a pleasant aura to this story--a clever tie-in.

The writing was quite good, the dialogue consistent, the personalities (once established) fleshed out and always "in character"--even at the very end when all was explained. A wonderful example that "fantasy sex" doesn't have to be sleazy or humiliating to be erotic. Loved it. More please.

MLJ

It might be a good idea to proof read and correct your story before putting it out here.

Too many spelling glitches.

Sorry, but role play is not an April Fool. It was a decent story otherwise, but trying to shoehorn it into an April Fools entry was detracting.

Needs a proof reader.

I kind of figured it was his wife, and this type of play I like a lot.

They both get a chance to fantasize a bit, expanding their playtime without ruiningbthdur relationship and their marriage.

Wrll done, and 5 stars.

Nice! Love the stockings and garters.

Nothing better than a truly loving wife

Need an editor!

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Cute. But it was a truly odd role play. Your title caught my eye; this is the first story of yours that I've read. And I'm glad to see you have more for me to check out.

Ending was never in doubt, but it was interesting story.

One comment, the story has these huge run on paragraphs that makes it difficult to read. Break it up into smaller paragraphs, your readers will thank you.

To say the least (COMMA) the wind went out of my sales. (SAILS - THINK SHIP NEEDING WIND) I hated my senior partner. Robinson-Irons-Sheeler was a good firm, but making Robinson the managing partner was the mistake of a life time. (LIFETIME = ONE WORD) The power went too (TO) (HIS) head.

This was too hard to follow.

Some great seduction and lines, like: those nipples of steel tasted of ancient honey and wine. :)

A perfectly wonderful tale of true, abiding love in all its forms.

It's a decent story, but you seriously need an editor. Way too many missing words and grammar and spelling errors.