All Comments on 'My Baby Sister Pt. 01'

Interesting start. Let's see what happens next.

The Herogasm on Literotica? About damn time. Welcome to the party.

Loved the story and the little bits of humor too

Interesting start.

You could almost leave it here. Great story, definitely will be looking at your other stuff.

5*

Tc

Very good start. I enjoyed this story a lot. Hot sexy and romantic. Looking forward to the next chapter. 5stars

Awesome story. The only negative thing that I would say is the interaction with her parents was rushed, clunky and inaccurate compared to the story. It wasn’t a gang war at all, that term implies 2 groups of people fighting over territories, usually for the right to sell drugs. Probably this story should end after page 1, and then introduce mom and dad in part 2, when you’ve had time to develop the dialog and interaction more fully.

Hopefully Jimmy and Sarah get married and have lots of kids together. Maybe even mom gets to sleep with Jimmy and dad gets to fuck Sarah?

Great story. But 5 guys is a little much.

Can’t wait for the next chapter.

AWWWsome !!!!! I hope there is more to cum

5/5, but a bit more rushed than your usual story. Hopefully the romance builds in the final chapter.

Beautiful but a fantasy unbeliveable but gave a great feeling to family 2when yours is so hateful

Reads like a book report .

Lost me as a reader after the thick 9 inch cock B.S.

Great story

You have some of the best one liners I have ever read in a story. The story is also sexy as well as romantic. Can't wait to read the next part.

That was some really poor writing, I don’t know if this is your first attempt at a story, but it has no flow, the characters are “flat”, no nuances at all, and so outrageous that no one would believe that this could happen, I mean the younger brother is apparently supersized in every way, including his fighting prowess, the older sister is so clueless that she can’t figure out what she is doing wrong when choosing a mate, all in all, it’s a very bad story, but I wish you luck with your future writing.

Sleeping and fucking❤️❤️❤️❤️