All Comments on 'My Beloved Husband'

But up pops your "Daughter's" boyfriend.

Where does the daughter come from?

Blew it on the first paragraph I didn't bother going further 1*

If you changed Tim into a triceratops, you could definitely sell it on Amazon.

It seems like English isn't your first language. Phrasing seems a bit awkward.

Too many grammatical errors to read. Get yourself an editor.

After slogging through several paragraphs it’s evident that English is not your primary language. As has been said by other reviewers, get an editor - or take some classes covering English Grammar. I want to enjoy your storytelling but the poor grammar makes it impossible to do so. I couldn’t get beyond the opening paragraphs…