All Comments on 'My Best Bed Buddy'

Very unique and very, very interesting. Too many of the stories are just simply repeats of older ones.

Thanks for a really good read!

poorly written. Not one thing of merit to be found in this story.

Please don't take this as an attack; it's meant as constructive criticism. I'm not criticising the ethics of your story - you know what they are, and they're for you. But when 'he' fucks Lisa, we don't have any idea of who she is as a person. We also don't know how complicit she is in her own rape. Yes, we know your protagonist sets her up to be raped - but is she acting out something that Lisa has fantasised about, or is she doing it simply for her own gratification, or for 'his'? When 'he' fucks Lisa, Lisa is just asleep. She doesn't react in any way. If she woke up while she was being fucked, how would she react? Does she know 'him'? Does she fancy 'him'? Would her reaction make the story stronger? If she doesn't wake up while being fucked, could she wake up at the end of the story? If so, how would she react then? I'm not arguing you shouldn't write about rape. I write about rape. But if we don't understand the relationships between the characters, and the motivations of the characters, it's a lot less strong than if we did. Is your protagonist setting Lisa up by 'him' because she herself wants to fuck 'him' or because she herself wants to rape Lisa by proxy (and if so, why?), or because 'he' has asked your protagonist to set Lisa up for 'him' (and if so, why did she agree?). You have the bones of a very edgy little story here, but until you tell us more it is only the bones.

....eroticism with Capitol Felonies.You did it well.Not quite sure why some of the relationship statements didn't jibe-pistolpackinpete

It isn't cool to even write a story glorifying the exploits of wonderful sex based upon drugging a person.

Its realy hard to say if you are a friend or enemy. If somebody has a friend like you, then you don't need any enemy... Please don't take my comment personally.