All Comments on 'My Brother's Best Friend Ch. 02'

Dammit. I realize I still made spelling mistakes! And! I didn't fix a couple of the driving scenes. Gears before gas. Derp. Sorry guiz. I'll try and do better next time. I just don't want to edit and resubmit and have to wait another 5 days to post. Thank you so much for reading!

Check your arithmatic too.

13+5 = 18

18-at least 5 = <13

So Dad didn’t figure it out first.

Best damn story. I've been reading Literotica for 20 years. I got to the end of this chapter and muttered, "Don't end yet!" I'd read a whole book about these people.

Awesome story, more chapters to come hopefully!

Don't visit First Time too often, had to go back and read that one first. Enjoyed them both, maybe a continuation after Shawn goes back to med school and Feline goes to college/trade school?

One nit-pick on the car side. 800 rpm is just above idle; dump the clutch and it will stall. If you meant 8000 rpm, that is a bit high for street Detroit iron. Somewhere around 4000 is probably more like it.

Anonymous

Check your arithmatic too.

13+5 = 18

18-at least 5 = <13

So Dad didn’t figure it out first.

========> Thanks for your help friend! This is the scenario I envisioned: Dad did figure it out. Just barely. Shawn's older than Feline by 4 and a half years. Pat is older than Shawn by a month. Feline had just turned 13 and started developing quickly, if you catch my meaning. ;) Dad noticed Shawn noticing. ;) Shawn would be 17 and a half. Probably a year later. When Shawn was 18 and some and Feline was 13 about to turn 14 is when brother Pat started noticing Shawn checking out his sister. If anything, Pat's math is off. Off by about 6 months. ;) ;) thank you so much for reading! (Yes I am totally blaming my shite math skills on a fictional character.)

RedMockers

Best damn story. I've been reading Literotica for 20 years. I got to the end of this chapter and muttered, "Don't end yet!" I'd read a whole book about these people.

==========>For real? That is so flattering and feels amazing to read! I'm really honored you'd say that! That's the best compliment, that you didn't want the chapter to end! And that you'd want to read a whole book?!? Well, I was actually really wanting to do that! I've got 5 chapters in total written so far. And so many other fun and sexy ideas! I want to keep going. I'm editing chap 3 today and submitting tomorrow. Stay tuned. I've been here about that long as well! I love this place. I decided to make a user profile, finally, last year. Thank you so much again! Serious, it means a lot.

Anonymous

Awesome story, more chapters to come hopefully!

=========> You bet Anon. And thank you so dang much! Wow! Awesome?? That's a pretty great compliment. Thank you! Thank you! 5 chapters are written so far. I am currently editing chapter 3. It will be submitted here, tomorrow. It took about 5 days, each time, for the last two chapters to be approved. So with any luck chapter three will be up by Wednesday December 1.

by fixer43

Don't visit First Time too often, had to go back and read that one first. Enjoyed them both, maybe a continuation after Shawn goes back to med school and Feline goes to college/trade school?

One nit-pick on the car side. 800 rpm is just above idle; dump the clutch and it will stall. If you meant 8000 rpm, that is a bit high for street Detroit iron. Somewhere around 4000 is probably more like it.

=========> Commenters here are the best. You guys are so helpful. I appreciate you all so much. Thank you! For the nit-pick. I appreciate it because it's free help! Yes, I meant 8000. I made so many typos. I think maybe at this point I need an editor. Heh. Anyways, I was thinking that was probably too high. Especially because most of the research I did on drifting was with the conventional drifting cars: BMW's,Honda's, Nissan's, Lexus. It was exceedingly difficult to find muscle car drifting descriptions. Although I did find a couple. So at least I knew that black beast was actually capable. So I don't make 6'5 gymnast mistakes again. I'm committed to the idea though so, full steam ahead. Lol (stubborn that's what that is) street Detroit iron. I really dig that. That sounds sexy a.f. I love Detroit. Been to Packard Plant lots. It's probably my most favourite place I've ever been to, Detroit. For a myriad of reasons. Come back next week chapter 3 will hopefully be approved. I'm just about to submit it. Thank you so much for reading and commenting.

Good story!

5

Really love this story! I have read all the chapters and can't wait for more.

One small nitpick, in this sentence on the first page of this story

"Shit, we probably know him as well as our own son, Patrick, at this point."

I feel like it should be either "... as well as our own son... " or "... as well as Patrick..." having both feels weirdly unnatural and really brought me out of the story for some reason.

Really really loving your style though, can't wait to read more!