All Comments on 'My Brother's Wife Ch. 01'

Need page 3... need to know what happens next!!

Good story. Needs to be continued.

Waist not waste.

nice start

Good story. You need to check spelling better. Holding her by her WAIST was hot and definitely not a WASTE,

Great story hope you have a follow up!

5 Stars……and both! lol Please continue.

Agreed. Need chapter 2, 3 and 4 asap

Needs more chapters, but her waist is on her body. Her waste is something she threw away.

"Nicolette ran to her room in a panic."

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That's where you suddenly switched from 1st to 3rd person. Pick a POV or use something to indicate the change. It could be something as simple as this

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but do SOMETHING.

Need to read about her positive preg test and swelling belly. She decides that the baby daddy should continue to fuck her and their baby(ies)

Great story. please continue.

It was good, but one small citicism: the change in narrator was abrupt and confusing. If you're going to move between narrators, put a line of dashes or something between the paragraphs to give the reader a clue the POV is changing. Other than that, it was pretty good.

Chris needs to continue fucking her. Once she gets pregnant with the first time why not try for more. Gary never has to know.

Wrong category

If you are going to do multiple points of view, the third person is better.

Don't listen to Kalimaxos, he's a well known tosser.

When it switched to her part I did have it different. I made it a much different font and gave several lines of space, but when it uploaded it made it all the same. Sorry, I agree that's annoying. Also, waist not waste, got it, that's my bad.

Great story. Just need her opinion and more sex and did it work

So far so good

please continue and thank you

Not a big Cuckold fan. I really had no problem with their original plan, then he decided that he wanted her. Piece of shit. This should have been in the LW category the way the story sits now. As usual in most of your stories that I've read, there is no ending, the story is in limbo.

Good brother....

A standard plot, but well-written with meaningful dialogue and just enough detail to fill in the story. Nicholette has been studying fertility and would have known that it's not the amount of cum but the timing of the delivery that is important. Therefore, having sex with Chris multiple times over multiple days would be the best way to ensure a pregnancy. The sex scenes were very good.

Compelling story and great writing — very well done. And when can we expect the next chapter?

Hot! 5

Good premise.

But all sex is rushed.

He agreed too quickly. She should have needed to 'convince' him.

'Convincing' should have been extended. It should have involved her tits. Certainly teasing him with them. And her describing how sensitive they were. Maybe a nice long, slow, edging, titty fuck to be sure when he came it'd be massive.

Some description of her pussy was needed. Maybe she'd needed to let him have a taste.

Three stars.