All Comments on 'My Cocky Valentine'

Boring and weird dialogue

Que fait ce récit dans Non-consentement/réticence ?

Lovely! A new art-form, the instant sex scene.

Never mind the haters, this was clever and creative.

I look forward to reading more of your imaginings!

What is even the point of submitting a story this short?

This deserves a sequel

Just a single scene with minimal build or characterization. Mummy just lets her son fuck her because ... ? No hesitation, no second thoughts. Just fucking. Not for me.

Did not like this at all just a son having sex with his mother while she sleeps there was nothing before the sex and nothing after it was too short and worthless 2 stars try again and make it a story next time

Ignore all these naysayers, it's only your second story. A follow up would be nice with a little more detail of what Mona looks like.

Keep writing and honing your craft. Take the comments and learn from them because even if some are rude, some of them are also valid

Not much to it and too short gave it a 3

Pleaae dont write anymore

good premise, much too short. I mean come on, like she would just immediately be ok? go read silkstockingslover and rework this. a day of sex with him not taking no for an answer and her will to resist gradually breaking down. his giant dick staying hard for the first hour and a half while he pins her down and slow dicks her, breaking in her ass to an even bigger cock than she was used to... this should be like 5 pages absolute minimum. if you are the female you claim to be, then dig into your own experience and what it felt like when you started and how you would actually react, how your love could overcome your reluctance. this should be a gem of a story instead of something that's not even a stroker.