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CherieA0221CherieA0221about 8 years ago
Was about to write it off

But then it actually got good. I didn't like the way it started but then it got a lot better. I would suggest adding more details, focus in on how they are feeling and what they are experiencing. I think that if you added this it would really make for a longer story and be more exciting.

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I write very amateurish fantasy for my own amusement and hopefully for others. I am strictly a two-fingered typist, so stories take hours to complete and sometimes finish due to cramping, resulting in careless editing and sudden stops. I attempt to present views from bo...