All Comments on 'My Fair Slut Ch. 04'

Great turn around! Can't wait for Tims revenge.

There seems to be a group of readers(I bet mostly young teens) that seem to love to vote down stories. They don't have the balls to confront authors. Ignore them.

Totally absorbing tale , nicely done with Jim regaining control. Super writing, admittedly Mind control is not one of my favorites, but this element of reluctance was necessay for your story. Enjoying the scenario and am looking forward to the downfall of the arrogant Paul. Well Done.

While browsing the Mind Control Hall of Fame, I ironically began reading this series with Chapter 3: The Making of a Master. The whole premise of the plot had me enthralled the whole way through, and so i immediately began reading ch. 01. In short, I read chapters 1 through 4 all in one big 4-hour marathon, and came gloriously right at the end. Though the homosexual bits were not my cup of tea, and left me quite flaccid, i read all of them, because even they had an important part to play in your Expertly Sexy plot. Fantastic read, and good writing, though you may want to put more time and effort into proofreading your work; I hate to say it, but this stuff is peppered with spelling and grammar errors. I love the idea, and you executed it well, but the reader's occasional need for a little extra time to understand the meaning of a badly-worded phrase can distract from the masterpiece.

it’s been a fascinating story with plenty of twists but the punishment scene he inflicted on his wife was waaaaay over the top, I don’t know if that’s just a British idiom so to clarify it was too much.

A golden rule for life and not just bdsm related things is never punish someone when you’re angry, it was brutal and broke the story (for me) out of the fantasy into something real and abusive.

I don’t know why I read this story (possibly?) because (being a woman) I tend to read stories from the female’s POV but wow did this story do the trick. If found the incest section absolutely repulsive, fortunately that was very brief.

So overall bravo and thanks to the author, some serious O time was achieved 😉

I find myself more engrossed in the plot than the sex scenes now and caught myself cheering when he merged with his other personalities. Basically I came searching for copper but I found gold.