All Comments on 'My Friend's Wife Pt. 01'

This had the germ of a good idea, but sorry to say it was poorly written. I write this in hope it will help your future output. Avoid use of words like 'when' and 'then' - they stop the flow of a story.

Proof read your work before you post - Cindy morphing into Sarah was a terrible mistake.

A good story needs a setup, transition and a payoff. The setup was okay, but there was no sexual tension in the transition - sexual tension is what makes a story interesting.

Keep writing.

This needs another chapter

Can’t wait for the next chapter and who gets fucked next

Awesome read, please add more after chapter 2

Nice story, but midway through Cindy became Sarah.

Wasn’t this a beavis and butthead episode?