by Every_Username_is_Taken
Blew it out the park!
Sequel please! And make it as cheesy as possible cause I got diabetes from how sweet this story is!
Excellent story, loved it. Just one small gripe: less ‘the girl’, please. ‘She’ - or the name - usually does the job just fine.
This story was quite good honestly. There where a few typos and grammar errors but nothing to horrid. Of course there was that odd ending. But you have a nice set up for romantic tension and overcoming odds. I hope you keep writing.
It was a super nice story, but I'll be honest, seeing this "superior futas , males are treated as garbage" is tiring and it really ruined the mood.
It's okay for his to doubt himself and all, but you didn't have to pull up that card, it's just a bad taste.
I echo the others & it needs a sequel. True love needs to win out. And a teen boy with an 8 inch cock is nothing to sneeze at. LOL
The ending is far too abrupt and pithy for me to find it satisfying, but it enjoyed getting to know these characters as I read, with their cute friendship dynamic and the drama that is built up.