All Comments on 'My Girlfriend's Mom Shrieked'

. . . the most popular author on this site writes only Incest? This is the best Loving Wives story I have ever read on this site . . . by far. Another masterpiece (with the emphasis on piece) by everyone's REAL favorite. I can't wait for the next chapter! Wow, the royalties should be rolling in on this one. Well, they would be if the royalty of this site didn't want to silence the one true voice of real erotica, which they know mostly nothing about. Did I say I can't wait for the next chapter? There are no fake babies in this story!!!!!!!

hi

this is an amazing story,i hope that our hero will fuck

is mother too.

oh and i almost forgot,please more of him and bonnie!!!!

leave the husbands in the dark,its more erotic this way

best regards yos

Interesting. Not usually a story line which appeals to me, but this is interesting. Just don't get too carried away with whatever you do in the sequel. There are enough females in this story, already.

-- KK in Texas

He really doesnt realize any oversized boy can be cut down with a gun or any other thing available. It really is a shame he is ruining three different marriages.

It would be great if he had his wife, his mother in law and his mom pregnant all at the same time. Damn good story. Thanks........Rich

await the next chapter. Tommy is the kind of cocky, dominant male I love to read about, and I hope he keeps getting his way and keeps seducing more and more women. Maybe he can branch out and seduce an employer or teacher or female cop for his own gains. That would be hot.

Thanks for submitting this and your other stories!!

Really good story, really well written. Please dont have him fuck his mum in the next part. It'll ruin it in my opinion

I think you should have the little Sister catch him fucking his Mother in Law.

She could come home, sick, and hear the moaning a groaning and go to investigate. She watches her Mother being taken from behind and sees his big, thick cock hammering her. She sees her Mother sucking his cock just after he has blasted a big load. She finds herself @ 15 playing with her own pussy and stuffing two fingers into the wetness that was caused by watching. When the two of them start going at it, again, she can't help but remove her clothes and walk in and jump on the bed with them. How can Mom save the younger daughter from being ravished by him?

Great

at least in part three, you'll have to jump ahead a few years though, to when Gail and Amanda are 18. It would be sensational.

Oh! I missed you like crazy!! So glad to see you haven't lost your touch. Great story can't wait for the sequel.

I couldn't make it past the first page - too many narrative failures that I couldn't accept, although credit to the author for the effort of writing it. Incidentally, if you call it a standalone story, and then say you're writing a second chapter, doesn't that make it a series and not a standalone at all?

Tommie is just a young sexual predator. I hope some REAL HUSBAND with balls catches him and knocks all his teeth out and then hurts the little bastard rapist. Oh the owman is a slut whore wife and should be exterminated along with Tommie

The cocky bastard has to fall. Payback has to be a real bitch for him. Fucking all the women is one thing but just pissing everyone else is TOO DAMN MUCH.

this what this site should be about,fun and sex.all you haters get a life or get to writing better stories.no you rather hate the writer of great stories.jealousy is a bitch.i saw a gay man belittle a pretty woman on t v the other day because he wanted to be her,so writer is that you.this comment is for the haters.

Loved the story, can not wait till you write and come out with the other side of the story. Thanks for first part it was great. Waiting in the wings.....

He wants to rub the cuckold's nose in it. The story was OK until that point. This boy sorely needs his comeuppance. The dad should catch him fucking his wife, bring a knife and denut the baggart, then put his bleeding balls down the garbage disposal. Can't have him die though,he needs years to suffer.

The young stud will hopefully never get his comeuppance. I want to see him continue seducing and cuckolding. Soo hot. It's not erotic any more if he gets payback. Maybe he can go after a future boss or professor and get them to give him things as they succumb to the pleasures of his hung cock.

waiting for chapter 2.

can't wait for Ch 2

Can't wait for part two... I liked the spanking at the beginning. I hope there's more of that!

I have read many many of your stories. I've never seen you write about degredation, or about glorifying chauvinism before. Regardless of your need to hone your skills, I hated this venture into misogyny. It is way beneath your capabilities as a writer and I hope far removed from your attitude about people. Stick with the dolphins!!!

more please

Can't wait for the sequel...

this is one of your best i can't wait for more. I've read all of your stories and you never leave me wondering why i read it. Keep up the great work.

WHY???? These are supposed to be enjoyable fantasies not shit like this - a very perverted mind to write something like this - not funny - not entertaining - seriously disturbing. We don't need this type of trash - there is already enough out there in the real world. What we want here is escapism and fantasy.

For a porn site, I kept waiting for the sex. What you gave was worse than a play by play done by a two year old. Where's the emotion, what he's feeling, what she's feeling? Where's the action. Who cares if you've got your dick in her mouth if you don't tell us how hot it is, how tight, how it feels when she swallows around you? Learn eroticism. You need to use your senses, sight, taste, smell, hearing, touching. Give it a try, you might even become worth reading.

was your best yet. Good luck with that.

I can't wait for the next challenge of his mom! It looked like she was already trying him on for size when they were taking the wedding photos. When is the next section coming down?

i thought the story was great! i'm not sure what exactly turns this from just a very good story to one that goes right through me, but i don't know if i've ever been more aroused just from reading something without any touching. i've been fidgeting all night trying to cover it up.

It's amazing how much people's reactions to this story vary! The Jasper bit was cute. I don't particularly like the cuckold angle - there's enough forbidden element with the girlfriend's mother. But it's tough to write a male-oriented fantasy that doesn't involve one guy and tons of women. It would be really interesting if someone managed to write a sex story with a well-developed (but non-sexual) relationship between two straight men. More than "hey buddy, let's go fuck some hotties together."

A new idea!! Can't wait to see how it turns out. Will he be a true Alpha in BOTH families???

loved the story, hope you'll get the second part out soon

ARE YOU STILL WRITING?? WILL YOU DO A CHAPTER 2 ??

Someone said as part of a criticism "What we want here is escapism and fantasy." In my view, this story was the ultimate in escapism and fantasy. Well, maybe not the ultimate, we are still waiting to see how the story develops, so maybe that will be classified "ultimate." I like the taboo and the forbidden. To me that is real escapism and fantasy because I can't do it, only dream about it. Dirty, yes. Sick, maybe. But escapism, yes. Fantasy, yes. Great writing, absolutely!

I CAN SEE MANY CHAPTERS FOR THIS STORY, YOU DIDNT SAY HOW BIG THERE FAMOLIES WERE?????????????

excellent story yet again, be quick with the next installment please!!!!!!!

PLEASE CONTINUE OUR HERO'S CONQUESTS AND ADVENTURES

Next chapter please! Show the lead's dominance over his father and father-in-law please! Domination is even more stimulating than sex, especially dominating those of the same sex.

Well done!!

Did I just overlook his next set? There are several ways this can run, so if I missed it, what's the title or when is it due out?

Gary

MORE SOON PLEASE lol

It is alright for Tommy to cuckold his father-in-law and even his future brother-in-laws (both sides of the family) but NOT his father ... they are the same kind of men, his father would never allow it ... he may share his wife with his son because Alpha Males do develop strong family ties and this could lead to a sharing arrangement of ALL the women in their families.

You had a good story going there until you started with the mind conrol bullshit. "I own my girlfriends dad" Get real

dont have a recommendation for sequel yet but that was a damn good story get the sequel out for us to read =)

One of the best stories I've ever read. Please write more.

You HAVE to write the next chapter SOON! Cuckold the wife's dad, then start on his father...then take the sister/sister-in-law when the reach lkegal age...make the fathers watch and assist!!! Might even have him knock all the women up with the dad's agreeing to pay to raise the kids and have his wife stud him out.

I'd really love to see a sequel of this story, you've definitely peaked mine and a lot of your other readers' interest with this. Please tell me you'll have it out soon?

That was one of the best stories that I mhave read. Can't wait for the next chapter.

All the negative comments are probably just guys who are already cuckolded or can't satisfy their women. Tommy is a fucking legend and I can't wait for part 2

You need to keep up the story, Have all the woman getting pregnant by him and have the fathers caring for all the grandbabys and servicing him when all girls are close to having baby's to keep daddy all happy

Including this inept "writer" !!

I hate the anonomous perverted pieces of shit who hide in the shadows to protect their fucked up sick ass identities. They are anonomous for a reason. Mr./Ms. anonomous if you don't like what I just said, Fuck You!

I gotta dmit though, this one was a bit much. Confidence, even arrogance is okay if it's warranted. But this young man has no proven abilities other than fucking and we all know life isn't just like that. For a twist it would have been good to have the cuckolded husband be aware, and approve. But at some point when the young man gets too cocky and he gets put in his place. Leadership isn't handed to people. It's earned.

I *really* liked this fic. :)

Will we ever get to see the sequel?

There are so many more adventures, including family, friends, and, as was stated, enslaving everybody so they are comfortable with their lot in life.

Take mom permanently and sleep with both every night with some nights making them vie for the single privilege.

I would love for you to follow up on this story. so much to build on and what about his sister and mandy? will he cockold Greg, what about his father, does he get into the act or will the whole family get into one big orgy? questions remain and so much for the imagination to expand on.

like to read more on this story it was well writen it gets your jucies flowing you can't stop here

Can't wait to see what happens next!

the title says it all

Excellent Can't wait for more.

Jim,

Really liked this story.Had to read it again.Would like to see you have Tommy (Jasper)preg. his mom,sis,and sis-in-law,then give mom-in-law another baby.Then drink milk from mom-in-law and mom after they give birth ! Again,great story the second time around.Please work on further installments.

Thanks, Bill

Ok, so when is the next installation. You seem to have a habit of starting excellent stories but not finishing them. Oh well.

would like to read more

Really interested in reading about Greg watching his wife get fucked by his son-in-law. I assume Mom will also wind up spreading her knees for her son. Your plot offers so many possibilities. You are one talented and wild writer.

Thanks for sharing and sure would like to read part 2!!

looking forward to the sequel

Hot story. Keep it coming. Thx

Please complete this story.

Please wirte the second part where he fucks his own mom and then his wife and mil togather. the third part can be with mom and mil and then one where greg ends up watching his son-in-law do his wife.

I don't kbow if I'm sick, but... I was hard reading this on my iPhone for an hour. Maybe I can identify with Tommy with that I fantasize about screwing my girlfriend aunt or grandmother. The subtle notion of incest with Tommy's mom, too extreme. Anyway back on topic every since I was a teen(22 now) I dreamed of slaying another man's wife. Thats the only fantasy yet explored. Bbw, ssbbw screwed, facesitting,smothering you get the point. Keep writing

~STR8 GHOSTIN~ 👻✌

I found this story because rated so high, but wordy is an understatement. The author has SO MUCH DIALOG - much of which is not needed and big long descriptions of trival items. I forced myself to read it, trying to figure out why others liked it, but this story makes me appreciate other authors more.

Other than a little wordy at times, the story line is GREAT and good luck writing the next chapter!

Both adult women: mom and Bonnie, Kirssy, Mandy and Tommy sister should all be sister wives and get pregnant. The spouse, Tommy's father and father-in-law should also be allowed to participate with which ever female they wanted as long as it was consequential. Possibilities.

Blessings

Please write the next part... where he does his mom ... and perhaps mom and mil togather...

we need the sequal. this was a really good story

I know it was a couple of years back that you posted this story, but please write the promised sequel its a fabulous story it really made me excited and now I will look at my daughters boyfriend with a different eye.

Kim

He's a bigger loser than his dad if he set up a friend to take mom while he gets a video PLEASE how dumb! Come on writer use some common sense here.

Good story keep writing,.

Tommy isn't a man - he's a creep and the women are almost too stupid to live if they are happy to share this loser. There may be

guys out there that are man enough for more than one woman but this worthless guy isn't. He's not a Dom - he's a bully. This story blows

WORTHLESS part 2. *

Usually like all of your stuff, but this one just kinda pissed me off :/ ....oh well, different tastes...

Please write more about the other women we have not had yet

Was waiting for Bonnie to get her ass fucked and maybe his own mom

We need the second part. Please post it.

I don't like rape as entertainment. It is a dark and disgusting side to human behaviour. Yes, I read the whole thing. I don't comment on what I don't read. He treats women with disrespect, and he inflicts pain and humiliation for his own gratification. How dare you write a character like this?

Any news on a part 2 to this story ?

Yes, Tommy is a vile prick, a disgusting bastard, evrything you want. Didn't stop me from getting a hard on and cumming before the end.

Scouries, you haven't written anything since 2012. Come back and write some more. Please! Pretty please with sugar on top!!!

I liked this very different story! You write very well and about alot different things, from alot different slants, than most writers here, do! I like your stories for that, makes for a refreshing read!

So, when's Part 2 coming out? Gotta see if this young stud actually beds both moms, his wife and sisters, after they turn 18!

Kinda want to see what you do with both husbands. Wondering which one will be his undoing, or just what you have planned for Tommy!

He's already got his limp-dicked father-in-law cuckhold. I don't think he will be any problem for Tommy, when he finds out Tom is sticking the pork to his wife and daughters! What's he going to say, when he finds-out his wife is pregnant, and knows it isn't his, but m,ost likely Tom's?

However, Tommy's Mom or Dad, could really throw a monkey-wrench in Tom's plans!

Just gotta find out if Tommy winds-up the Alpha dominant male in both these two close neighbor families, or not!

Come on Scouries, hurry-up and get that second chapter or part written and posted here for us, why don'tch'ya? :)

Think I'll go find other stories you've written, to amuse me, until I see the next chapter of this story posted here! :)

Fantastic storyline, excitement, love, romance, the dark sleazy side everything. Absolute masala mix

What makes this story so great is how strong and funny the non-sexual parts are. I dare anyone to read, "The orangutans excited me."

"Idiot! They're fucking monkeys. Who do you think you are, Tarzan the ape-man?" and not laugh out loud. Or the description of the looks exchanged between the women as the photo of "Jasper" and his women is taken at the end Priceless.

YOU MUST WRITE PART 2!

It would end with Greg discovering what Tommy has done and putting a bullet in his brain. Why? Because that's what guys like him deserve.

have chrissie her mom and his mom have his babies and then when sister and sister-in -law become 18 they dominate tommy and make him their sex slave reversing the tables on tommy. bob w. just something to think about

for scouries. Big cocked, oversexed, low moraled young stud -- who everyone seems to like in spite of his behavior. Well written, with reasonable character development.

I gave it a five just as an erotic fantasy.

Where is the follow up

And I'm not surprised none appeared from this author. The obvious ending is that Dad puts the "boy" in his place - a shallow grave. The arrogance he displayed ruined the story. Even for fiction it was ludicrous.

I really enjoyed the beginning. The playful lead up to the domination was hot and back story attraction that lead to it happening made it plausible...making the story even hotter. The rest of the story is erotic which I like but unrealistic at times. Perhaps more thought into why the girlfriend would be ok with him and her mom. Maybe the girlfriend gets off on watching him dominate her mom. Since this is a very taboo story I would like to see him make the ladies take turns dominating each other. Thanks for the story and keep up the good work

This story should be continued!

Want more of this story please

I have to admit, I enjoyed this story.

It kept my attention from start to end.

I realise the author is not completely 100%, but this story really could do with a sequel.

Considering the amount of time the author has been inactive, I won't be holding my breath.

Scouries, sir, if you read this, I hope you are back to full health, and firing on all cylinders very soon.

thank you

I hate cuckold stories, they all drip with meanness and contempt and I have

No use for such people, man or woman. At least, and it's very least, this one has an acknowledgment of some dim awareness of getting off on holding someone in such contempt but it kills erotic thoughts in this reader's head like a cold bath. Write a story about how how later in life he is appalled at what he'd done, because this kind of character attribute can poison a person. And no, I have never been 'cucked', and am waiting for that story to be written, when a person's true nature loses all he loved.