All Comments on 'My Lesbian Stepsister and Her Mom'

Much too short for any character development. The sex was hot but hurried. We don't even know the name of the main character. She's naked with Donna but all of a sudden she and Nina are taking off her underwater. You need to think things through and then write them. I'm sure that the concept in your head was fine, but you need to write all of it down so the reader understands as well.

Way too rushed.

I stopped at the word lady. I doubt you understand its meaning.